Etcetera 1

Ocean of illusion,

    Traditional Gravitational pull,

            Droplets of "Ambrosia" !!

                                Publicized news,

       Army of ants ,

             Again a great exodus !!

A deceased moth (or ideology),

      A grand procession ,

             Eroded soil and shoe sole pad !!

                     The old , wise Pholcus,

 Real genius of artistry,

      The never ending  expectation !!

Author's Note

Published in "Foxtrot Uniform " Online Literary Magazine on merit

Reviews

[Dye]

I like your take on this. The references to the "higher powers" and what I took as peasants. I wasn't sure about the layout of the words at first but after reading it gives a sense of a "marching" to the poem. Not sure if I'm making any sense, but I'm not as good with words. :)

[Anand Sehgal]

Yes, a march in time, a march in viewpoint, a shift in paradigm. Do not worry about words, write whatever you feel. thanks dear :D

[icelandicblue]

I saw the name Electra and could only think of the Greek myth and Euripides tragedy. Armies, revenge and tragedy are what I feel from this. I like the word placement like steps or marching across the page.

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot for the kind review. yes, it says Ordem Progresso ..in metaphor indeed

[Mark Heathcote]

for me it has a very powerful feeling of the hive on the move in desperate times.
All at the mercy of the environmental elements, sadly something’s never change.
Great poem!

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot my friend for your kind review :)

[kublakhan27]

This is one of those rare pieces that you can read several times and take a different meaning from it with each read. Very rich in its metaphors and evocations. Great piece :)

[Anand Sehgal]

Thanks a lot Kublakhan :) I am honored :)

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure :)

[TrimarcoRansome]

The imagery you create in words here is fantastic, your concept is solid and flows very well...But creepy crawlies make me shudddddder!

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot. glad that you liked the thought :D

[TL Boehm]

as with humans so with insects and arachnids. Spiders and this poem gave me a shudder - only the shudder from this poem was much more appreciated. This is a thinking man's write - well crafted - strong and intense.

[Anand Sehgal]

Glad that you liked the images :D kind comments indeed

[Heartshaped Rain]

I very much enjoyed the form and philosphical nature of the write, it's a very studious exhibition that displays the intelligence of the writer, the never ending march for Symposium and the expectations of finding it.

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a ton. Special comment indeed :D

[Heartshaped Rain]

Daddy long legs make for fascinating metaphors.

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot :)

[Frieda P]

Great format & imagery, 'droplets of Ambroia' is stunning, I'm caught up in your elegant web here, excellent read Anand.

[Anand Sehgal]

Thank you Frieda for your kind comments :) keep reading :)

[MsJewel]

Outstanding writing and form - Truly brilliant writing. :) Juie

[Anand Sehgal]

Glad that you liked the piece. :)