Seamstress

Upon her work table there is a box

wiith needles and thread and a rusty lock

 

Remembering the conversations they have had

the hurtful words that stung so bad

 

The broken heart and fractured mind

all those words had left behind

 

 

She starts to work so feverishly

upon her brand new masterpiece

 

Her fingers moving nimbly

the thread picked out  so carefully

 

Oh the horrible words that have been said

so through his mouth she pulls her thread

 

She sews his mouth up nice and tight

remembering those dreadful nights

 

Forever silenced he shall be

Her masterpiece of broken dreams

 

Reviews

[zainul]

The bad lovers must be cautioned.
They have to face the same consequence!
The 'masterpiece' is unique and fabulous.

[Riley Mistwood]

Thank you so much

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
You have superb imaginative talent.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

It is quite good you know. Lyrical and flowing with a slight melodic bounce and simple but effective imagery. And rather curious framing, to me at least. The way you have made this sandwich of verse. Symmetrical rhyming ends (for the most part) in the top and bottom three couplets; then there is the non-rhyming double couplet in between - the transitional meat of the whole thing. It pivots on this point, for there is where the reader begins to slide down the slippery slope. Into the art gallery and out the butcher shop. Twisting, turning, bending, churning... and then, that hell's kitchen ending where you stuff the quackers in and sew up the bird. Now that's some poetic cooking! :)

[Riley Mistwood]

thank you.I always love your reviews!

[Euro]

Nice poem!
I like the rhythm and the message of it.
The sadness yet victory of this girl because of this man.
Keep it up! :)

[Riley Mistwood]

thanks

[Elizabeth]

Oh wow! I like that there is a surprise of what she is sewing! You also have a great style. It seems to work so well together and flows so nicely! I especially like the first two lines! Great poem!

[Riley Mistwood]

Thank you!

[Sir Jaykom]

"with" in first stanze has double "i" ...

Beside that, this is pretty good!

[Riley Mistwood]

thanks :)

[Rob Santana]

Very creative! I like the ending the most.

[Riley Mistwood]

thank you