Alone

I just felt upset about life i wrote a poem about even though i suck at writing poems. I tried so here ya go

Putting on her mask 

She walks out with a “smile"

They see a happy child with no problems 

With every you look happy today!

She get stabbed

Pushed back

Wanting to cry 

She doesn't what to be there

She wants to disappear

How are you people ask

She lies

She wants to run

She wants to hide

Oh you look cute today

Stabbed in the gut

She starts to feel numb

She wants to cry

She wants to die

Run away

Hide 

Cry

Author's Note

please dont be mean this is the real me im showing here

Reviews

[Delmar Cooper]

Hello,
I read both of your offerings on this topic. I prefer the poem; it is more direct and gets to the point. Both the poem and the story need serious proofreading. There are a lot of casual errors that distract a reader from your message. Most of these errors are simple typos. No big deal, but they make your writing less accessible to your reader.
If you really want to know how to write send a read request to JayG for your story. He is a good teacher and if he reads and comments his advice will be frank and helpful. If you don't, that is if you don't want to use this Café to better your skills that is okay too, just keep writing and have fun with it.
Thanks for sharing both pieces.
Cooper

[Zeden]

I think you need a shoulder to cry on.
With all the respect🙃.