Long Way To Go

"I am me.... nothing different but pulled in so many ways... why?"

 

Gentle breeze across my face

Whispers of pain

I am to blame

 

Troubled waters roaring

Voices in each ear

Decisions

 

Dusty roads calling

Heart full of words

No pad to write

 

Friends turn away

Time is not mine

Frustration

 

Happy times

Sad times

Who am I?

 

Long Way To Go

Author's Note

Time.... Me.... When I think I am doing good... I get knocked back on that road that causes me to start all over again. Life presents changes in all forms. Who to trust is hard to know.

Reviews

[Emily Rose]

Ahh, we get nice little sketches of life, here. You leave a lot of room for development, but I do rather like it the way it is: the openness reflects life. My only comment would be that the lines "happy times/sad times" seem a bit weak in comparison to the rest of the lines, since they don't feature imagery so much as a general feeling. Generality has a time and a place, but in this case I think you would want something a bit more specific. Good job.

[TL Boehm]

The frustration is palpable in this piece. Well written.

[Cliff Rhodes]

Very nice expressive writing, and I am paying special attention to the

"Who am I?"

I often wonder that same thing about myself, and mostly enjoy the part about finding out.

[~*a beautiful disaster*..]

this is an awesome write. we all get to that point where just when we start doing good everything slips from under us. thanks for having the courage to write about it.

[Here's What I Say]

That's life for everyone. Life throws us for a loop when we least expect it sometimes. The cynics are never surprised because they expect it...problem is they're not expecting good things either. Humanity is a strange group; we need and even crave change, but we fear and reject it at the same time. We want all the benefits of change and all the benefits of sameness, without any of the consequences.

Life is a long way to go, but when it ends, we will wish that it wouldn't.

[jakelsen]

Nice job. We all have a long way to go, and much to learn. Did you mean "troubled" waters?