Temptation

Shall I allow my heart to think?

 

Knowing my sorrows

would open windows

I can’t see through

 

My spirit is fragile

guarded by flesh

I no longer claim

 

Taking my hand

would lead me

into darkness

 

Temptation is there

to surround my

heart and soul

 

Evil knocks loudly

As the pounding

Excites my soul

 

Eyes open

Only to realize

Emptiness beside me

 

-Temptation-

 

 

 

Reviews

[M@]

For me, this piece was a tad confusing. I understand the last portion of the piece, which drives home the point you're trying to make on the ideas of temptation. I can understand how sorrow or sadness can lead people to make wrong choices in order to fill a gap, but I myself wouldn't necessarily call it temptation. Despite that, the point you make is an excellent one: you can't fill emptiness with emptiness.

[TL Boehm]

this one is right on the money...temptation - the rush - is an empty shell. Nicely done.

[Dorchadas]

wow... beautifully intense... sorrowful but passionate at the same time... great piece... I love it =)