Waterfalls

Rushing waters bring clarity to life in the beginning and even in the end....

 

-No words spoken

Deep breathes taken

Are yours not mine

So be careful

 

-Endless glares into

My heart and soul

Will burn you if

You touch

 

-Memories of love’s

First encounters and

Pain from failures

Are now yours

 

-Waterfalls sweeping

Heartbeats under water

Until the bubbles die

Smooth waters I see

 

-Rushing waters touch

My ears with peace

As I swim toward

The light above

 

-To start over I

Shall be reborn

Into this world

A new soul

 

-Feel my energy

As I enter your

Heart and smother

Your soul forever

 

-Waterfalls-

 

 

 

Reviews

[M@]

I agree with TL Boehm, there's powerful baptism imagry in here, along with water:fire::blue:red::peace::passion immagry as well. I get the feeling that pain is displaced and replaced with pleasure through an outside source, be that force God, a loved one, a significant other, etc. I also get the feeling that in order to turn one's pains into joys also requires a reliquishment of self to the forces around you, so that a true reborn process is performed, rather than a replacement of a smile in place of a frown. Very nicely done, you have a knack of being able to touch on multiple issues with few words, simple word choice, and simplistic imagry that is fairly easy to interpret (though I could be completly wrong on my analysis).

However, with the lack of punctuation throughout this piece, I found it difficult to read, insofar as I wasn't too sure where to pause or keep reading. A lack of punctuation is fine as it remains a stylistic choice of the author, but it was still confusing as some lines could be read as a continuous thought, where as others may have read better if a slight break was taken at the end of the line.

Well done, I enjoy reading your work.

[TL Boehm]

beautifully written...reminds me of a baptism of sorts.

[PoetryXpressions]

Wonderful write, enjoyed every word....was such a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing.