Downfall

Fall and rise are part of life, few give up yet some learn and stand tall...

Downfall

All dream-destinies for a better tomorrow

Turn ideas into reality, huge loans they borrow

Troubles knock everyone’s door, you’re not alone

Look around, feel unheard cries; World…full of sorrow

When success comes and hits life
everyone is utterly on different skies
even those whom we never knew, are close
Time seems frozen, life turns as a beautiful red rose

Life can throw you in smoldering hell
all the doors clogged, no path left to dwell
Sitting petrified, bitter memories with prosaic soul
world tarnished, money vanished, no one to propel

Deep, dark thoughts running in our minds
Sometimes find a way to abolish your soul
To the misery stuck on you, nothing left for fight
Was this the reason we touched opulent heights

Everyone hates, blame, curses, enjoy abusing you
Even your own self in its own way, is annoyed too
Magic of life is going back in time, watching movies
Often sad, some fun and few packed with glories

How can the world disregard, wondrous histories we made

 myriad lives we touched, flaming sun we provided shades
We only thought to make the world better place
Now they look at us with abhorrence, our hard work has fade

Yesterday squandering millions, today not a single penny
damn felt blessed with her presence, first one left was Jenny
Tensions start pummeling brain, merely luxury left was smoking

 Lifestyle revolutionized so swiftly, strange mystery left provoking

99% of life is painted with poignant tales
1% of life brings us magic of feeling ecstatic 
consider failure God’s wish, accept without malice
Downfall an eradicator, its life's we’ve to gracefully face

 

It’s not only you, history is full of characters

One day they were king, next in vagrant’s attire

Treasures are left where they belong

All they took with them was their dirty desires

 

A. Amos

Author's Note

Reviews

[KAin]

Destiny is not a fickle thing... What is weak is man's ability to understand it. We can lose ourselves, stepping backwards into the rapid-moving river of fate, and be lashed by emotions on the way, and then drown in circumstances beyond our control. But despite this, there's value in human determination. You've touched on many things in this poem, friend, but these themes are what stood out for me. Keep writing.

[A. Amos]

Thank you Landred, I love your depth insight and words of your wisdom means allot for me.

[Mira ThePoetess]

I like that review .... quite profound Landred

[Santiago Santa Cruz]

The last stanza is definitely my favorite! I'm really not well suited to pass judgment on poetry, but this piece surely made me think deeply. I think that if a writer can challenge me to contemplate over the course of nine stanzas, then neophyte to poetry criticism or not, you did an excellent job. Well done.

[Santiago Santa Cruz]

Also, just noticed the wonder that is: the read request haha. Sorry it took me so long to acknowledge this piece.

[A. Amos]

Thank you my dear

[FlamingPhoenix]

"Even your own self in its own way, is annoyed too"--I really like this piece, but especially this line. Another great work!

[A. Amos]

Thank you bro

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I need not elaborate...A. Amos...
a wit of a wit of a write...
and expressive in nature...
the intent and focus...
in design grabs you as a reader...
learn and take with you...

[A. Amos]

Thank you Glen, for your kind words

[Glen Yumang Manese]

In depth with this one...as with most of your works...yw...A. Amos...

[B.J]

Your writing is amazing. This is the best ever. Every line is an imprint on my mind.

[A. Amos]

Thank you Barb, truly honor my friend

[B.J]

Your welcome

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

truly amazing write my friend. Blessings



It’s not only you, history is full of characters

One day they were king, next in vagrant’s attire

Treasures are left where they belong

[A. Amos]

Thank you my friend

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're very welcome my pleasure as always. blessings Kindred poet

[VelvetRosetta]

Love it but have to say the ending is the topping on the cake! "Treasures are left where they belong
All they took with them was their dirty desires" Nailed it!

[A. Amos]

Thank you glad yoi lenjoyed

[wordman]

you know amos I really like this emotional write we have iived this way so long it`s second nature we have become numb to the world there is pain every where we are desperate all over the world we try to help here and something wrong over there and now it`s getting to the point that people can`t help
well ig god is coming to rule for 1000.00 years we sure need him now because power seekers and greed has not helped

[A. Amos]

Agreed bro so wisely you foreforwarded my words thank you

[wordman]

any time my friend I always enjoy your work

[A. Amos]

Likewise bro

[Rachelle]

This is why in every decision or turn you make, you need to seek His wisdom and blessing, then create your strategy and lay it all out for Him to prepare the road ahead for you in all humility…..

[A. Amos]

Thank you my friend

[Nusquam Esse]

First, I like the message behind this, and some of the word choices are superb. The flip side to this is that several of the words are also lacking, and either feel awkward or are just lacking the in the power they 'could' have. The main problem here is that you have a few tenses off and articles missing and so it makes the poem flow awkwardly at times. This is not a huge problem if it is what you intended, Poetry is difficult to proof, because 'improper English' is preferred at times, such as incomplete sentences. All in all a good poem, keep on making them!

[A. Amos]

Thank you appreciate your review

[What Was]

There are very few words I can say to compliment your poem short of simply "Brilliant". It is greatly evident in every line and in every word that your scribes are well thought and articulated. I applaud what you've written! Keep up the great work.

- Isaac

[A. Amos]

Thank you buddy...