Downfall

Fall and rise are part of life, few give up yet some learn and stand tall...

Downfall

All dream-destinies for a better tomorrow

Turn ideas into reality, huge loans they borrow

Troubles knock everyone’s door, you’re not alone

Look around, feel unheard cries; World…full of sorrow

When success comes and hits life
everyone is utterly on different skies
even those whom we never knew, are close
Time seems frozen, life turns as a beautiful red rose

Life can throw you in smoldering hell
all the doors clogged, no path left to dwell
Sitting petrified, bitter memories with prosaic soul
world tarnished, money vanished, no one to propel

Deep, dark thoughts running in our minds
Sometimes find a way to abolish your soul
To the misery stuck on you, nothing left for fight
Was this the reason we touched opulent heights

Everyone hates, blame, curses, enjoy abusing you
Even your own self in its own way, is annoyed too
Magic of life is going back in time, watching movies
Often sad, some fun and few packed with glories

How can the world disregard, wondrous histories we made

 myriad lives we touched, flaming sun we provided shades
We only thought to make the world better place
Now they look at us with abhorrence, our hard work has fade

Yesterday squandering millions, today not a single penny
damn felt blessed with her presence, first one left was Jenny
Tensions start pummeling brain, merely luxury left was smoking

 Lifestyle revolutionized so swiftly, strange mystery left provoking

99% of life is painted with poignant tales
1% of life brings us magic of feeling ecstatic 
consider failure God’s wish, accept without malice
Downfall an eradicator, its life's we’ve to gracefully face

 

It’s not only you, history is full of characters

One day they were king, next in vagrant’s attire

Treasures are left where they belong

All they took with them was their dirty desires

 

A. Amos

Author's Note

Reviews

[KAin]

Destiny is not a fickle thing... What is weak is man's ability to understand it. We can lose ourselves, stepping backwards into the rapid-moving river of fate, and be lashed by emotions on the way, and then drown in circumstances beyond our control. But despite this, there's value in human determination. You've touched on many things in this poem, friend, but these themes are what stood out for me. Keep writing.

[A. Amos]

Thank you Landred, I love your depth insight and words of your wisdom means allot for me.

[Mira ThePoetess]

I like that review .... quite profound Landred

[KyleMPorter]

"It’s not only you, history is full of characters
One day they were king, next in vagrant’s attire
Treasures are left where they belong
All they took with them was their dirty desires"

Awesome, I loved this in particular. Great poem, chalk-full of strong ideas and strong wording. Well done.

[A. Amos]

Thank you Kyle...

[ReneeJ]

This poem touched on issues I already knew, but it is the use of language and as many already said, the depth that makes it all seem so new. Well written, you are a really great writer

[A. Amos]

Thank you Renee...

[Ellen Hammond]

This is very deep and tells the tale of life so well. All go through many trials and occasionally have a euphoric moment. I think of life as a big classroom where the secret is to hold on tight through the hard times and learn from all life throws at us, good or bad and especially from our own mistakes. It can all work for good if we but learn valuable lessons and keep on keeping on.

[A. Amos]

Thank you so very much Ellen...

[Mira ThePoetess]

The world is a huge dilemma .... such a mystery .. and human nature is sure one of those mysteries ...
Life is getting a bigger place for pain, loss and negativity ... as some people change into a worse image of what they can be while others have a real hard time dealing with this sad bad cruel image of life ..... and eventually .... everybody hurt ..... I loved the depth of your verses .... very good ink my friend :D

[A. Amos]

Thank you Mira...

[Mira ThePoetess]

You're most welcome Amos :D

[Daydreamer]

A very poetic pen writes of the great expectations, gains, losses, desires, anguish and what we envision our life's to be......our current existence and the mark we are making during this period of functioning on the earthly plane. You so aptly point out we exalt and suffer while here. You may leave a fortune but not a true legacy. But the spiritual giving and true deeds of hope and encouragement of the lowest beggar will surpass the value of a rich person's legacy....the poor's legacy is one of unsurpassed value...it is one of quality to mankind in the form of deeds that were done for others and the betterment for all mankind. We fight to reach the top rung of a ladder and suffer greatly as we fall.....yet the selfless person on the bottom rung simply steps back and learns from the top rungs error and as they mount that bottom rung they hold to the ankle of the person in front of them....not pulling them back but supporting and pushing them forward and hope that the person behind them will reciprocate in kind.

[A. Amos]

Thank you DD...

[ms. barrie]

Very profound write, written with eloquence...And
Wonderful use of vocabulary...rhyme, and meter.

You're an amazing story teller, for you're able to touch
Different emotional levels...vividly painting a mirror
With your words of humanity's parasitic sociopaths
And malignant narcissistics. Brilliantly penned poem.
Thank you for sharing! :)

[A. Amos]

Thank you Barrie...

[ms. barrie]

You're welcome A. Amoss :)

[Crystal Ellyson]

I love this poem. It speaks to me on some many levels. When I am reading the poem, it almost sounds like what I am thinking at different times of my life. Great Work!!!!!

[A. Amos]

Thank you Crystal:)

[s y e]

A, this is absolutely breath-taking.

//How can the world disregard, wondrous histories we made
myriad lives we touched, flaming sun we provided shades
We only thought to make the world better place
Now they look at us with abhorrence, our hard work has fade //

This was my favourite stanza, it just stuck out for me and was so vivid... powerful write, A.

[A. Amos]

Thank you NB...

[kar]

I love this wonderfully written piece. It is a thought provoking piece to say the least. The second to last stanza is my favorite of the entire piece. Beautifully penned; thank you for sharing.

[A. Amos]

Thank you Kar...

[kar]

You are very welcome!

[charlie]

Lots of good feedback already, Amos. I would add just one small note on structure: if you are to bother with the inclusion of commas throughout your writing try also adding appropriate full stops. Maybe capitalise each line as well.

[A. Amos]

Thank you Charlie, for your visit and review...