War and Peace...

first of my kind....so please criticism and feedback required!

The distant tune of the weary farmer

Humming in chants as the eve grows calmer

The ripple of waters in a cerise hue

And receding rays bid us adieu

Scores of fishes bathe in rhythm

As the serene night shrouds us in

Splash of water as the fisherman retires

Tethers his yacht by the jagged coastline

The lonesome swan nods off goodbye

As shimmering stars hum a lullaby

The carpet of shadows finally is laid

And I pray with a yearning unsaid.

I sit and stare at those cosmic beams

As the galaxy exudes an assort of tints

The calmness of the dark is enchanting

Can’t it dwell eternally unceasing?

An era long lost since I sensed peace in men

But I dread the nightmares lest return again.

Tonight no drones of hungry birds

No burnt flesh or bones in shards

Tonight no children scuttling in dread

Or canter of soldiers with tears unshed

Tonight no sinister holes to veil our fear

Devoid of blackouts or weapons that tear

Neither pools of blood nor cadavers of terror

Or shrieks of maidens masked with horror

Tonight I can draw water from my river

Devoid of that scarlet and of foul odour.

 

Those were our brothers with pledges to deliver

Stationed in terrains of rocks and meshes of wire

In times of harmony breathing in the chill

Same was the fate with their rival uphill

Even share a drink with the foe beyond

But obliged to slay as the war raved on

In the mercy of gluttony wringing out their life

And voracious regimes fuelling selfish strives

Whilst youthful widows wail in despair’

Orphans gaze by the highway with a prayer

Mothers seek cover from a leak in the roof

As humanity weeps in gloom and grief

The planet offers homage to those lost souls

As mother earth seeps in the blood in bowls.

 

The human race has crouched too low

The almighty too apprehends this so

No peace you can perceive until you arise

An apocalypse is bound in the next sunrise

A spiritual stirring worldwide

For the human race to survive!

 

 

Reviews

[Ruth]

This is heart wrenching work!
Beautifully descriptive, I have no critique as such! lol
I think it tells it perfectly and raw!
Balanced with heart felt emotions, gorgeous piece xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is Magnificent! Superb writing...
The imagery is set up to be a peaceful night, while thoughts are on the Apocalypse that may come. War was given such a dynamic description, that it was heartbreakingly real. Well penned.

[Vincent]

That's good, it creates a very vivid imagery. I liked how it started and slowly got more intense until it was just too much and the violence had to come out, on paper as it does in reality. Apocalyptic, maybe even morbid, but the message is out and I like the sound of it.

[M.Babu]

"The human race has crouched too low
The almighty too apprehends this so
No peace you can perceive until you arise
An apocalypse is bound in the next sunrise
A spiritual stirring worldwide
For the human race to survive!"

In times when war is so rampant, we've actually forgotten what peace feels like...but was there really peace to begin with I sometimes wonder...i actually think that war has always been a part of the human experience, but with time it's grip and importance to politics, to world power and domination has intensified and now war has become surplus and insurmountable...

I like your thoughts...they are almost in line with my own and i appreciate such a well written piece! Made it easier to convince me and i'm sure it will have the same effect on the other readers :D

Thanks for this!!

~M.Babu~

[Rene Velez]

it's amazing the depth of sorrow and destruction humanity can cast, with the weight of an anvil in the heart of man, peace is all that is needed in life.
great images here and the words are colorful in delivery.

[Cassie Fraga]

REAL.... **stands up and yells** BRAVO....BRAVO...
"No peace you can perceive until you arise"- I dig that line right there!!!
so much meaning and truth... very interesting...
**tips my lyrical wand to you**

[stars are far]

this was so deep.. great piece.
well done

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wow...what depth and intelligent shown in this writing...
some real valid and thouht provoking points...
excellent :)

[zero binty]

You have more guts than I do to tackle this subject matter. Had it not been for a condition that I have, I definitely would have served in the military. Much respect to those who do, did, and will.