Piercing eyes....

Stabbed and pierced often

Flesh and thoughts alike

Marred and betrayed recurrent

Strange apathy - a lasting deposit!

 

Hopes implicit

But wrecked repeated

Currently numb

Arrogance facades passion!

 

Love intense and yearning

When smashed frequent

Now no veneration or abhorrence

Just Impassive and detached!

 

Neither music, nor melodies

Only piercing eyes, parched and blank!

Reviews

[Alana McGuire]

This is beautifully written!! Full of love and numbness and betrayal. I love having your words grace my eyes. It's a wonderful pleasure :)

[Rene Velez]

love and betrayal, love and loss, a great way of penning frustrations of love.

[J. J. Nightingale]

WHEN BETRAYAL BECOMES THE NORM, HOPE IS MUTILATED .. BUT THE HEART CAN SURVIVE .. .. AND APATHY WILL BE A THING OF THE PAST .. LOVE CONQUERS ALL ..

INTERESTING THOUGHTS .. J.

[~ Stefanie ~]

This poem was very well-written. You took the reader to the depths of sadness and pain and then gave a glimmer of hope and contentment (at least that is my take on it). You word choices just added to the uniqueness of the piece. Well done!

[EMF]

A marvelous piece. It begins and ends bleak, but, unless I am wrong, in the middle, a glimemr of hope. Marvelous wordplay and theme. A truly striking work

[Drey Rock]

Im really impressed. It felt as if if I was being transported into a state of pure tranquilty, slowly unveiling a softer, delicate side , it evoked every emotion in me. Your poem is richly texturized like that of a velvet impastio used by Vincent Van Gogh. Your truly talented. Keep up the good work :)

[Drey Rock]

Im really impressed. It felt as if if I was being transported into a state of pure tranquilty, slowly unveiling a softer, delicate side , it evoked every emotion in me. Your poem is richly texturized like that of a velvet impastio used by Vincent Van Gogh. Your truly talented. Keep up the good work :)