Piercing eyes....

Stabbed and pierced often

Flesh and thoughts alike

Marred and betrayed recurrent

Strange apathy - a lasting deposit!

 

Hopes implicit

But wrecked repeated

Currently numb

Arrogance facades passion!

 

Love intense and yearning

When smashed frequent

Now no veneration or abhorrence

Just Impassive and detached!

 

Neither music, nor melodies

Only piercing eyes, parched and blank!

Reviews

[Rossen]

The blood of romance lets out...
gripping till the end,well expressed ~

[Arielle Ann]

thanks for stopping by!

[Moriarty]

Powerful powerful emotions...makes for a very nice read...thought provoking piece...

[R J Askew]

This one fascinates! It reads like a dispute between sensuousness and intellect, with the latter seeing but not feeling. It was great to see a 14 liner from you also. The last four lines are my faves. Hmm, I wonder if I should change my avatar back to the cuttle fish?

[stars are far]

Well done..
Keep it up :)

[Sahar moonlight]

Thats so powerful and directly to the point.
'Stabbed' the first word, it just gave the poem a perfect begining

[Tate Morgan]

Love can overpower and words cant always express the grandiose nature of the feelings,But sometimes we get it right thank you you did well

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

Love intense and yearning
When smashed frequent
Now no veneration or abhorrence
Just Impassive and detached!

Neither music, nor melodies
Only piercing eyes, parched and blank!

......................Very nice write anisha.....my greetings and enquiry.

A very powerful write! The way you wrote it is so vivid, a strong ending! as love should be pierced... not only the eyes... wich make loveblind....

[Pratik]

powerful, strong words and intense thoughts. Superb write