The grey...

Crash!!! Where is she?

Grey grey swirling in,

Is she is trapped? She is nowhere!

She tries to turn back,

But grey grey churning in!

No gates to return, are there any?

But she will fight, yes she must,

Yes a gateway, afar she can glimpse

Barely discernible in the brume,

She sprints and trips, up and runs,

The gate is ajar barely a flap,

She squeezes and arrives, yes her home,

But , Hazy hazy the view

Vague is where she came from

She craves to touch to sense

Flesh earth grass and steel

But no she cant she can’t

Better to depart she thinks

Flustered she returns

Still grey grey everywhere

But hail, blue is that other side

Angels with wings seem to glide

Gazing at her in curiosity

Beckoning frantically” come”!

She strides and hastens

The silver archway she reaches

But locked is it, latched and chained

 She darts to the reverse side

Locked, shackled and bolted it is too!

Neither a mortal nor a soul

She has nowhere to go

Oh the grey the grey

Engulfs her, fences her within

She can’t depart either way

Entrapped she is in a wait evermore!

 

Author's Note

life after suicide, sudden death, near death experience??? something I perceived!

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Great stuff. The urgency of the word tumble is sustained from start to finish. I immediately felt locked in a dream twisting this way and that, just as dreams will in their puzzling ways. And yes there is often one predominating facet, grey in this case. There was a hint of salvation with the silver archway, hope. But, and this was the best part for me, the gate is locked. Getting behind it was sooooo typical of a dream! But to find it locked on the other side, too. THAT was a magical dab! Very strong, and terrifying too. I can imagine the soul of suicide finding the way forward to salvation barred and then finding the way back to life barred also. That is a terrifying thought. And all so urgent and immediate and real, just as those experience you note are for us.

[No name]

Great emotion and imaginary are expressed in this piece. Nice write.

[abhas]

well i never had near death experiences or how the gateway is.... but this write seems to be swirling like smoke and you can see it make weird shapes and figures you never know that existed... but i guess more real than a mere flight of fantasy...
great write...

[sweta'karman']

In a state of flux she killed her and still wandering for peace,what a pity....quantitatively expressed her suffocation where smoke rises to grey her sight ...really a nice dark one

[Lily Mae]

To me this has an idea of what fear there is attached to death.. the fear of being trapped and never moving into the light or crossing over. Being left behind in a void. I think you have penned these emotions perfectly..xx

[BlueDreams]

A very creative imagery see here.. great job..

[Thea]

While I was reading this, I can also feel and see the scenery...This is so creative...Life after a sudden death; no wonder a person will really be curious when it happens...Great poem...Well crafted... :)))