Just here!

Well...this is inspired by a song...one of my favorites...I took some words and molded it into poetry in my own style...ha ha...hope you like it! (Side note- not one of my great works though!)

Close by me you reside

The more I sense

The more you seize

You are here

Just here’!

I lose me to you,

But win you to me!

For a while we met

Someplace you came

Without a cause

Asking none we loved

Shackles seemed to cease

Close by me you reside

You are here

Just here’!

The more I sense

The more you seize

How this world could

Snatch you away from me?

You were here

Just here’

I lost me to you,

But won you to me!

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Sahar moonlight]

Your words will always impress me.
Your poems are so rich, I really find it perfect

[J. J. Nightingale]

FREE TO LOVE ...

NICE .. JASMINE

[Alana McGuire]

"I lose me to you,
But win you to me!"
That's such an awesome way to look at falling in love!
I realy enjoy this a lot. I like the meaning and the different fonts and the letter size and the format. I just like it all. :)
I thought about picking some lyrics that I like and writing about them. This inspires me even more so to do just that. Thank you for a lovely write!! :)

[Sagar Waingankar]

Emotional quest liked it!

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Good one!
the last two lines especially.....

[Moflo]

Something about that last line had me keep re-reading. Very interesting write, compelling, definitely keeps the reader engaged. Nice work.

[paparapapa]

"I lose me to you,
But win you to me!"

These lines were just beautiful. The poem sounded like a song to me with a soft and bittersweet melody. It flowed really well and so smoothly. Great job once again. :)

[An owl on the moon]

What a beautiful rhythm that dances one through this wondrous love song... It sings of that happy place we all long for.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem a lot. The use of the language made the poem a pleasure to read. I like the flow and the story in the poem. I like the ending.
"I lost me to you,
But won you to me!"
Thank you for a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Ruth]

I like the structure of this, a lot of emotion displayed in lamentful tones and it holds such powerful imagery! Wonderful poem xoxo