My blood I taste...

One that I composed when by mistake I bit my lip...h aha...hope you enjoy it!

I bite my lip
The blood gushes out
I lick it clean
Sucking in the stench
Warm and red
It trickles and seeps
Damping my clothes
Drenching my neck!
I had longed for long
To suck up the blood
Of a foe long lost
But now I grasp
While my own blood I taste
The foul stink it emits
I vomit,I faint

Should I be able
To drink his blood?
The blood of filth
So much Fouler than mine?

Reviews

[SUGATA M]

No speciic comments I would like to make here....like to think more about your this creation

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

This poem is like a carving on the stone. It is a wonderful statue telling your brilliant wordings. With regards.

[Vedant Goenka]

wonderful.. briliant wit the usage of words and to the point.. very well phrazed/./.the last stanza is the magic!!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Very unique write... I get an image of a vampire accidently biting her own lip and thinking she may like it, but turns out she doesn't... and maybe discovering that she doesn't like blood at all..That's what I get from this piece. Nice write! very thought provoking!

[Jhean]

Nice poem, deep and dark from a simple mistake. i like it

[Manpreet]

Lovely poem! I like the wide span of thoughts in your work.