Unfold the mysteries?

With all of innocence and purity I was born
Opened my eyes to the love and care the world offered

Caressed the flowers and buds
Winked back at the twinkling stars
Drew lines on foggy planes
Wondered where the sun set and how the moon diminished its size

Wondered how creation looked so similar in parts yet looked astoundingly so different as a whole
How the creator can be such an exquisite artist...!!!

All common in their own way yet so unique, so strikingly different!!

Walking down the lane I wondered what made people so serious
murmuring their way through, too distressed to even enjoy the sunny day
Had this urge to peep through their eyes, the world they see..
What made their life so disturbing!!!

Invisible connectedness to strangers, and content in that state of unknowing well being
while friends and acquaintances pulling away with time

Universe!!
Don't unfold your mysteries
For you make me wonder
Keep me childlike under your wings of wisdom

Preserve my innocence and devotion for you
For you know it all
And I am awestruck at your divinity
I Trust You...

Reviews

[Krithika]

the peom you've written as a beautiful feeling to it....u twisted the words into a beautiful meaning that these sentences carry.

[Shweta]

Thank u so much!

[Inda]

Well, I don't know what flaw you speak of. The tone is perfect, it has a child-like feel to it which carries the narrative along. And it's consistent throughout, I think it's flawless. Own it, this is a great write!

[Shweta]

Inda, you're being so generous!! I wanted to go on n on on this but i put an abrupt end to it, which seems to show in d end. This i thought might obstruct the flow. If u say its flawless i couldn't be more happier. Thank u so much :)

[Shweta]

This was one of my very first write. It has its flaw. It is the result of my confusion related to this subject "Innocence". Do have patience while reading this and lemme me know what you think...Thank u

[Paradox]

Mind blowing.... What a poem .
What an extraordinary concept....

[Shweta]

Thank u so much Paradox !

[Paradox]

You may call me Aritra. That's my real name.

[Shweta]

That makes things easier.