Flabbergasted

 

I thought I was flying,

I was falling,

I thought she was hot,

She was fire,

And her touch was the finest thing that I never knew.

Reviews

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

firstly.. the title is one of my fave words
*smiles*
and the final line grips the heart and gives a rather painful twist..

wonderful evocative tiny write

[QuietPoet]

Simply nice. Short, but right to the point. Great job.

[ScreenScribe]

Very nice.

[Sean M. Addams]

a very deep write... short but alot of meaning behind your words... very nicely done!!! overall a very impressive piece!

[R J Askew]

I like it, but TWIRLED is still bossing my mind. This one feels like a warm up for the much stronger poem. But I still like it. The other poem I love as it is a full on tumble of surreal backflips.

[Jmartins]

Very nice.. Great job..

[Periac]

very intense...short and beautiful

[*~Kristy~*]

This was a very beautiful little piece