Black Coffee, Red Moon

 

The stars are sleeping,

Or they may be hiding, behind the dark moody clouds

The moon is blood red,

Like the whites of your eyes

Your tears have dried up,

Your hope has packed his bags and ran away to hide

So she is gone, and took your best friend and your home and your ride

 

The time is now, the moments here

To shake the dust off and cut free

No need to shout, no need to scream

Some times when you lose, you really win

 

With a little time and a lot of pain,

You’ll beat the clouds and stop the rain

The stars are shining, the moon is bright,

Like the whites of your eyes

It’s time to wake up, and smell the java

To shake the dust off and move on

You did your best, and that’s no sin

Some times when you lose you really win

 

Reviews

[Jaded rose]

Enjoyed this...says a lot especially in that last line "Some times when you lose you really win".. thanks again for this good poem.

[emmajoy]

Fine words to explain the past moving into the future with a clean slate .. ' With a little time and a lot of pain, You'll beat the clouds and stop the rain ' learning by sad experience .. move on.

There's a moral to this and that's much appreciated.

[cest la vie]

This piece holds the mantra of my life. We have pain, stumble, bruise ourselves along the way. Like you so eloquently stated.. Pick yourself up, dust off that not-needed debris, and proceed to steppin'.. Nicely done!!

[R J Askew]

Like the last line especially ... all is never what it seems on the surface right? There is a great feeling of calm exhaustion after some emotional storm in this.

[Liza]

i'm in love with this writing, especially the parts where you say when you lose, your really win. thank you for sharing.

[QuietPoet]

Absolutely wonderful. I liked how you went from negative to positive. You expressed the feelings well in this. Nicely done. Loved it.

[J Carly]

The positive ending took me by surprise. I like surprises. The flow stumbled a bit, in the first stanza. But the stumble seems symbolic of the painful experience described, therefore necessary. Altogether, a well thought out and very well executed write here. Well done!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Let me tell you one thing, the imagery in this piece of writing is simply OUTSTANDING!
Its' so beautiful and descriptive , that while I was reading it...I felt as if I'm there glancing the read moonlight
Simply awesome :)

[Sean M. Addams]

very cool piece like the upbeat message in this alot... i lke tthe last stanza in this alot.. nice job on this one!!!

[John McGrael]

this is a good poem!!!

my favorite lines are: "With a little time and a lot of pain,
You'll beat the clouds and stop the rain"