A Chat With Dad

 

I poured my heart out to my father,

For the very first time the other day,

But only a couple of days before that he’d passed away.

 

I could see him sitting there,

Listening to all my problems and fears,

With a smile on his face, he was nodding,

But in his eyes I could see the tears.

 

He started to fade away slowly,

The same way that he first appeared,

I begged him to stay,

Please don’t go, please, please, father dear.

 

He shook his head, and I saw him fade

As if he walked out through the wall,

I screamed for him to stay,

But he didn’t seem to hear my call.

 

He turned around and looked at me,

As if he’d seen a ghost just before he went,

Up to this moment I still wonder what he meant

                            © The Flawed

Reviews

[Lorraine]

I love how you ended it with a little mystery. Your poem is heartbreaking in its tone but truly elegant in the writing. The sorrow and regret were so passionately delivered that the poem seems so alive and breathing. This is one emotional piece that does not go way overboard with the drama.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[quill of shadows]

i feel this to be a metaphore to my curent relatioship with my father though he is still living well don keep up the good work

[miSS LEaf]

i can relate, lost my father years ago, he still inspires me.. it's ironic how we remember people more after they die..
~L

[Amanda]

I always love your writing. I think you should enter my contest I have going on right now, its like the last one you entered from me. Poetry- what you feel. Try it :) And your an amazing writer, i love all your work!

[Scarlet Pulse]

This is a private and sad moment. Then again there are many happy things I feel from it as well. There are things in the poem that are left unsaid maybe purposely for the reader to figure out. Good job.

[QuietPoet]

Wow.. This was.. Just wow. Very deep and sad. I am sorry for your loss.

[ac4st3r]

***cry...

[cest la vie]

This is my first read of your writing. From this piece, I'm sure I will be reading many more.
such a heartfelt, thought provoking piece. Lessons learned as well. To quote John Mayer, "Say what you need to say".
I too recently lost my father and we did speak the day before his sudden passing, and I continue to this day. Thanks so much for sharing such a personal, honest piece.
Lynne

[O!]

This brought tears to my eyes....coz this is me at my mothers deathbed......thats when i asked her stuff i wouldnt dare to before....but she couldnt talk back....and i knew she wouldnt be there the next day.......
and i still wonder if she could hear me......and wonder what her answers might have been......

ty for writing this.

x,
O!

[Butterflymom]

Thank you for sharing this powerful piece. Nothing in our worlds are ever quite the same after losing a/or both parents. You have expressed deep, and heartfelt emotion with fantastic imagery, and description.