Who was I

Who was I

A Poem by Mina
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Open interpretation. Share your views:) This poem is based on a book I read Veils of lies.It revealed domestic violence and how often it is ignored.

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An open ground
A crowded place
Have you you seen me there?
My dead body has no shadow.
I'm there with nothing to see .
I'm touch less, known less, and life less.
Have you seen me there?
Do you see me now?
Dead cells, dead space, dead me.

© 2013 Mina


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Mina
Ex:ignore punctuation mistakes

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Jo
Hi Mina
This reminds of going to the funeral of a distant relative who had lost all his closest family and been in a home suffering senility for years. There was basically us there (attending through a sense of duty) and one representative of the Care Home - who looked totally disinterested. Your poem shares the same sense of sadness and futility that surrounded that occasion.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mina

11 Years Ago

I'm glad you connected with my poem :)
Thank yu souch for reviewing it means a lot x Jo
I like this Mina
I like it a lot.
Keep writing
My Friend
All Good Things,
Neville

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mina

11 Years Ago

Thank you Neville
Im glad you liked it :)
i read this as you are in a crowded place but no one notices you.. to all intent and purpose you are invisible..

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mina

11 Years Ago

Yeah
Thank you so much :)
I'm you guys are understood the poem so precisly :)
Mina

11 Years Ago

*glad :) xx
"An open ground
A crowded place" great start. Draws one in.
Also speaks of being invisible so that so many of us can identify with.
Keep it up.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mina

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Awsome piece, really interesting, it drew me in.
Great write :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mina

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much :)
I'm glad you liked it x
annabellee

11 Years Ago

you're most welcome :)
A sad voice calling out loudly in despair, afraid he/she is invisible. Clean up the punctuation and grammar, but it is a powerful peace, nonetheless.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mina

11 Years Ago

Thank you :) so much
This is really interesting. :))

I just noticed that in the first line it should be "An open ground"
:))

Posted 11 Years Ago


FelicityAllona

11 Years Ago

But I also thought this might be about an invisible kid who suffers a lot. :))
Mina

11 Years Ago

Exactly invisble was the message I wanted to give accross.
:) thank yu ;)
FelicityAllona

11 Years Ago

your welcome :))
Wow . A very nice poem Mina . Beautiful . An open ground...:)#

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mina

11 Years Ago

Thank yu ;)
Sorry I posted my comment in the wrong place:P
Kinda new :)
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

You are welcome...No biggie...:)

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Gravesend, kent, United Kingdom



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