No one

No one

A Poem by Illumina

No one can ever understand,
No one there who can comprehend,
No one there to mend,
The shattered pieces of my chest,

"Mom, dad, I always feel so sad",
"Ungrateful child, why are you never satisfied?"
Maybe I'm sort of going mad,
It just feels like I lost all that I had,

Once upon a time oh love you saved me,
So why is it that now you have left me?
How can I now ever be happy?
Why did your love decrease for me?

We barely talk anymore,
Weren't we supposed to last forevermore,
My heart still bleeds for you from its core,
I'm still worried about if you are okay,

In my dreams we are together again,
And you take away all my pain,
Protected in your strong arms,
But all of it is not in the reality.

© 2017 Illumina


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Wow! This is such an amazing read. I truly love it!
"Mom, dad, I always feel so sad",
"Ungrateful child, why are you never satisfied?"
Maybe I'm sort of going mad,
It just feels like I lost all that I had,
This would be my favorite stanza. It just speaks to me.

Keep writing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Illumina

7 Years Ago

Thank you Lily :)



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So powerful, took my breath away

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is a beautifully written poem. The flow of the words is almost perfect and each line has so much depth to it. It is easy to relate to for those who have struggled with their emotions. The ending could have been a little better, it seems to stop a tad too early, but all in all it is a beautiful piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Illumina

7 Years Ago

Thank you :)
I appreciate it
I did like the honest tone in the words!
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Illumina

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading it :)
I felt the emotions of loneliness and heartbreak while reading this. It's a great poem! And I appreciate the rhyme.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Illumina

7 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Wow! This is such an amazing read. I truly love it!
"Mom, dad, I always feel so sad",
"Ungrateful child, why are you never satisfied?"
Maybe I'm sort of going mad,
It just feels like I lost all that I had,
This would be my favorite stanza. It just speaks to me.

Keep writing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Illumina

7 Years Ago

Thank you Lily :)
I love your author name... This was absolutely captivating... Reminded me of my very own sad story, and not only did it replicate that melancholy feel with perfect ease... It was relatable to the point, I would say a very good chunk of people reading it, would find multiple personal elements within... That is the sign of a good write... Captivatingly penned...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Illumina

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words.
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Of course...
I can sense a hint of deficiency and helplessness which I can totally relate to, good work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Illumina

7 Years Ago

Thank you !

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Added on July 7, 2017
Last Updated on July 7, 2017
Tags: Lost love, heartache, sadness


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