Bring me to life ~

sound of birds
spirit of the wind
& the gold shiny sun
sound of trees and water
That graceful feeling
i felt while i listened to them
i'm wishing to feel it again

happy soul come back to my body
and draw a true smile on my face
a smile that never been there

I wish
but darkness covers the light
voice of tears
sounds of screaming
occupied my soulless body
that has no life`
it's hopeless and sad

that's the life i now live in

Author's Note

White-Inked pen ( my sensei grammar ) help me and add some ideas :) .
Thank you a lot ^^

Reviews

[hamza bargog]

nice

[Legacy]

Ame Rain,

Contrary to your beliefs this poem is not a mess... if so, it is a beautiful mess.

The light swallowed by darkness is done very often, you have your own uninque spin on it. Is it really that dark? No, you absolutely adore the beauty, you recognize it, you feel it in your soul, you beg for it to show -

Such is art... thank you.

Legacy

May want to consider entering this one into the Dark Secrets contest of Poetic Infusion Society...

[quinfinn]

this is sad and beautiful. nice format and structure, and nicely worded. don't worry about grammar. that's what editors are for...

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A gladly refreshing prose on creation and birth, well penned

[White Ink]

lol anytime my "jinta" :D
next time i wanna read something happy ok ;)
well done!