Quietness is all I've ever dreamt of.

I was inspired to write this after my two year old nephew drowned. It really just popped in my head, but I added my own little sick twist to it. I hope you enjoy.

Falling;
Worrying constantly;
Breaking to pieces;
Tumbling farther down now;
Streaming blood across your face;
Destroying, destroying you with every frustration;
Crying out for mercy and everything around;
Screaming every little vain statement;
Cursing in the face of death;
Drinking to the shattered dreams;
Shrieking, unbearable pain cannot be stopped;
Losing yourself through all of the despair;
Swelling bodies as water is inhaled and exhaled out of your lungs;
Dying in a pool of blood;
Walking straight towards the light;
Drowning slowly;
F*****g up completely;
Missing everyone and everything in the past;
Trying to run away;
Failing terribly;
Quietness, at last.

Author's Note

If there is anything you do not like, please, tell me. I'd appreciate the help of bettering myself.

Reviews

[Dillon Cotter]

really dark and gives me a awesome feeling and vibe. i like this poem alot! well done/

[Cari Lynn Vaughn]

You have some excellent imagery here. Very vivid. I might break it up into stanzas is all.

[Casper Cross]

Beautiful words, masterfully constructed, dark symbolism...Enjoyed it very much.