promise

PROMISE

 

You promised not to hurt me

Well you just did

I thought you were different

You’re worst than them instead

 

I should have kept me guarded

Should have kept my cool

I should have kept my mouth shut

How did I ever come to be a fool?

 

Now my tears have fallen

Tears as leaden as stones

Remember that a woman’s heartache

Is worth a man’s million years to grow

 

 

 

 

 

 

Amata Luna

Author's Note

I think I was hurt when I wrote this? Little by little I'm gaining little confidence on some people. Too much. Or too little. I hate the feeling of being promised something only to see it before my eyes; broken. Sana hindi ka nalang nangako. NAKAKAASAR ka.

Anyway, thank you to everyone who will take the time to read and review this writing that may seem out of sense or nonsense at all. I'm so loss for words. :'(

12:24 AM@5/24/2012

Reviews

[Kuhr Gred]

Hmm... I see ! Sometimes Promises really broken.. naranasan ko na rin yan hindi sa love pero sa kaibigan.. that's the reason why I hate world when i was young... pero narealize ko rin minsan pag nag-eexpect talaga! nadadala yung emotions.. anyway this great little bit cried when i read this.. but a advice for you.. "Whatever happens be happy and true to yourself.." siguro wala man aq karapatan magsabi yan pero yan lang naiisip ko ;) kasi lam ko rin ang nararansan mo sa poem ito.. thanks for sharing :)

- Kuhr Gred (Genie)

[Sahar moonlight]

This poem talks real feelings... its really hard to believe on someone who would break ur trust.
You've expressed heart feelings so nicely!
Thanks for sharing :)

[CHRIS ANDES]

yes you are..
you're deeply hurt
but this piece seems so beautiful to be the product of frustration
=]
marunong ka pala magtagalog
=]

[Lizzy]

Wow, you are growing in poetry. Simple words but so profound. I love the line "tears as leaden as stones." It reminds me of the Stone of Tears from the series Legend of the Seeker. It represents love so pure so intense that the tears that yield from it will harden into something precious and everlasting. And if the poem is about a guy, a lot of guys are clueless. We are never fools, but the poem really captures what is in the mind of the rejected. Great job. You are an artist.

[daydreamer]

Pain wonderfully and vividly conveyed. Lol.. i hope it is hindi and if it is it is quite interesting:)

[Jed Sabffle]

broken promise comes with broken trust.
I also hate people that don't have conviction to their words.
It's really hard to expect from someone...
And so I know what you feel right now..

anyway. you created an excellent poem again.
Full of emotions -hate, remorse, loneliness.
And I somehow agree with the last two lines. :)
thanks for sharing. :DD

[Desmund Tiny]

nakakaasar talaga kapag may Taong nag promise nang napaka-halaga at umasa ka ng sobra sobra....... Mixed emotion of bitterness and anger...... pero ganun talaga hindi lahat ng Promise natutuloy...." Expect the Unexpected "

ahuhuhu naalala ko dito yung may nag-Promise sa akin na isasayaw nya ako nung JS pero kinalimutan nya....... wew... ahay...... (~^-^)~ *hugs*

[Thea]

And yes I perfectly agree, Amata. Nothing hurts more than being fooled by those seriously painful lies that promises hold. What hurts the most? You expect but at the end, you'll just get hurt. Mahirap talaga magtiwala tsaka umasa lalo na kung ung taong un hanggang salita lang pero ndi nman mgawa-gwa.
Cheer up...
:)))

[Ramya]

Sad and painful. But there is beauty in your writing. Brings out the emotion so well. The last two lines are so very true!

A good read.

[Suditi]

Awww :(
You're right..it hurts real bad when somebody promises us something, and then breaks it. But you know what? You'll be fine. It will pass. It will be over before you realize, if you choose to be strong. I hope the best for you.

As for the poem..raw, honest, direct, painful.
The emotions have been put down beautifully.

Take care okay? :)