We're not Even Close

Cold hands, shaking limbs, turning stomachs and a heart beating fast. What more description can I be more mad?

YOU DO JOKE ME?

There was this guy, a man I don’t know

At first he was sweet, but man he was cold

He used to be a honey; I discovered he was a dummy

Who never even cared, what a woman has or bared

Do you tease because I’m a woman; Are you mad because I am?

Did I stepped into your ego, Or you think I’m out of mind?

You have called me names before them; you have tested all I have

You have said worst things about me that I never even dreamed about

You think you’re macho? You think you’re cool?

Well think again honey, you might be looking like a fool

You don’t care I’m hurting? You don’t think I’m a girl?

Well I respect an older person, but not one who speaks like femme

I thought you’re cool, I thought you’re fine

But enough for those thinking, impressions never are just as slime

I’m born to be a woman; my mother raised me as one

My father told me to be human and always think of everyone

Do you ever act your age? Do you ever respect a babe?

I bet you do with naivety, I bet you don’t when you’re flared

Think about others, you’re not the only one alone

You think I’m self-centered? Well look at you who talk

It’s not about being a girl, unless you know how to be a man

Man enough to respect others, man enough to be MAN enough

You still hate me? Still I’m mad?

Well, young man you get wise not with age,

But what you ever learned that is as good as life.

Author's Note

Forgive me my friends, but lend me your ears, you know I write when something brings me into it. Too bad it has to be, it has to be like this.

Reviews

[Jed Sabffle]

Awesome! :D
very clear.. You expressed everything directly..sincerely..straight from your heart
i think..poems can be said really beautiful when there are genuine feelings in them...And yours is overflowing with striking emotions...
Outstanding piece.. thanks for sharing! :D

[Writingfox]

The emotion is carried forth vehemently. Nicely done. You could work on the flow and English usage.

[Lizzy]

I'm liking this, but I think a little work on the flow would be better, and some some of the sentences may need some rearrangement. That's just me though, but yes, I like it, but I feel that the point is vaguely lost in the sentence structure.

[Eve Brown]

Hahahaha, I love this. It's right to the point, and sets whoever you're speaking of in place. Good work.

[Ellen Brook]

Great! No words to describe your down-to-earth piece of writing. Keep it up!

[Desmund Tiny]

wew.... Very straight forward.... i was thinking of someone while reading this... but that person is super insensitive....... great piece!!! i love it..... (~^3^~)

[Thea]

Very straight-forward! And I was thinking of someone while reading this, a person just the same as the descriptions of the man you're talking about in this poem! Grr...He acts so gay and I hate it...He often makes fun of me...Tss...Kainis tlga...Bakla ata eh, haha! Napaka-manhid tlga...He doesn't even know that he's already hurting my feelings...Anyway, this was a powerful poem! Excellent work!
Deserves a 100... :)))

[Priscilla Sayers]

Vent away my friend, I love the sass!

[CHRIS ANDES]

this is another unique way of self expression
.nice write
=]