Among the Mist

Dream along, even in mist

It's when at times that I look at you
That's I see my face and then I knew
It's when you cry that it breaks my heart
That it shatters me even in and out

When the wind blows down
The tree leaves fall
The blue birds flew
And whispers became songs

It's when rain falls down
That tears hid me
Along the rain, among the mist
Wet and cold and achingly in pain

It's when I look up
That I see mirrors from heaven
Stark, clear blue
And always true to one's haven

You are a mist,
A dew on grass
You're there before morning
But never even last

You are a dream
A dream come true,
But when I woke up
It shattered you

I wish you're a tear
Forever in my eyes
I wish you're my blood
Forever in my veins

I wish you're my thoughts
Forever in my mind
I wish you are my everything
Forever in my heart

But as far as the wind blows,
So is my dreams,
I'm left with the mist,
I'm left in tears

Now would you care to tell somehow
Why it has to be like this?
You are a dream...
As vivid among the mist

Reviews

[CHRIS ANDES]

sounds good and full of love =]

[Lizzy]

Wow, talk about flow! Your poem was so beautiful! I could relate to the pain. I think there is a typo in the second stanza, but you are talented :)

[Sahar moonlight]

the emotions flow in your poem so softly.
I've absolutely found it great one!

[Team_Jaward_Gale]

so emoitional but still great

[Writingfox]

I didn't get into it until the third stanza but from there you made me feel each emotion you were conveying. You may want to strengthen the beginning a but. Great job, I look forward to your future work. :)

[Thea]

Totally beautiful! I like the choice of words here...The imagery is wonderfully used in each and every line...You've created such idea that will really appeal everyone...Great work, Amata!
:)))

[Eve Brown]

This is fantastic. I like your choice of words.