The Energy of Consciousness

the universe knows no difference

between you and I 

life sparks us all into this tick tock world

wind up dolls 

click clanking around

 unknowingly 

we carry this most precious gift inside

the energy of consciousness

glows bright

right out of each cell 

please do not tell me you truly believe

the creator of worlds 

bestowed motion with

empty promises - hoping

each life might prove itself worthy 

of a gift 

We've Already Received

Reviews

[conversations with her ..]

this spoke to me, and you've inspired me.

poets like you are very special, keep up the good work

also I'm new on here, so it would be an honour if you could review my poems!

[A.marie.speaks]

I'm humbled by your comment. If I've inspired you then I have completed my mission. Thank you!

[Glen Weimann]

Some lovely alliteration, flow, and phonetic mid-sentence rhyming. And then the kicker with deliberate in your face capitals. Actually that last line reminded me of Donne's last line 'It tolls for thee'; sort of sit up you idiots and think!

As always, very nice work.
Nigel

[A.marie.speaks]

Many thanks, friend! Humbled by your praise, as usual. Love that the last lines come off like that... just as I had hoped !