stardust in my eyes

A Poem by A.marie.speaks

just some thoughts on life

what ever entity masterminded the big bang, designed gravity, sculpted matter and dark matter..

wrote the rules of physics and created chemistry.

this being must see beauty from every angle: supernovas right down into the atom..

all pieces are relevant.

the spark of life starts so small.

The power of energy - the cycle of it

is proof of something much larger, connecting it all.

We are so small in the spectrum of universes in space-time.

Relativity is all that holds us, as humans, together.

What makes us so special?

This small world is all We know.

This small world is who We are.

Our statement to the creator; of what We're made of, what We stand for.

Our energy, our atoms, the particles that make us were birthed with that Bang.

Did anyone know We would grow out of it? Was there a plan? Is there a plan?

Are we the product of a lucky evolutionary strand of survival of the fittest?

Or was life molded along the way -

set to stray the path of all other life,

mixed together just right

to create the ultimate being?

what ever entity wound up our clocks,

pieced together each cell in working order...

or did it?

perhaps it was all a mistake..

perhaps it was not meant to be a beginning.. but an end..

what was there before hand?

these questions drive me mad..

i am an ant, a paramecium, an atom, a single proton..

from the perspective of all things greater than the Earth, than this solar system, than the Milky Way..

yet I have the balls to ask where I fit in ?

© 2016 A.marie.speaks

Author's Note

just a lazy write to calm my overactive mind.. not meant to be grammatically correct.. writing just to write, not a deposition by any means.

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Mr.Write

Great poem. Dark matter is currently an ad hoc variable, plus the big bang doesn't make sense when you look at the evidence such as the fact that it violates the laws of conservation, unusual red shift in stars appearing too near to us, the Cosmic Microwave Background evidence that may have been contaminated by space dust.

To answer your question of "perhaps it was a mistake?"

Remember flowers have certain colours and scents to attract bees, flies, and other insects to pollinate. You have exactly ten fingers and ten toes, the length of your foot is the same length as the space between your H L E bone and your styloid process, likewise the elbow to middle finger tip is the same length as the waist. "See the golden ratio".

But I'd like to conclude that "Occam's razor" usually works best with these sorts of things.

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

Yeesssss. You have brought up so many concepts that I find unbelievable synchronicity in. While stud.. read more

7 Years Ago

No problem, I like reading good poetry. ^^

Nigel Newman

Hi there. I was browsing WC, so I dropped by a few acquaintances, and here I am.

It's interesting to see your author's note, because I was balancing two streams of feedback in my head. One about the subject matter of your piece, and one along the lines of 'why write it at all, or why like this?' as a sort of rhetorical question.

So, as for the subject of the piece, well goodness only knows.
- Humans have 'invented' Gods and religions, which have fought ideological and bloody wars over many centuries, in some attempt to rationalise all of this, grab power, dominate, be greedy, etc.
- Stephen King wrote 'Under the dome' where some outside being basically tried an experiment by trapping a community to see what would happen.
- Scientists theorise about specks of minerals that may have combined in such and such fashion, and are now in raptures about a probe that crashed into a comet.

So that's three example takes on it, and there are several others. Incidentally, you close by intimating that you showed courage to ask, but actually I think millions of people ask and always have done since whenever human existence began. Maybe in a few millennia's time, someone will figure it out. Till then, well ....

Now the second feedback. Why write this, or in this manner/style. I just came from reading a piece that was called a 'story'. It was one very very very long paragraph, with several very very very long sentences each containing several clauses. And I basically gave up because I couldn't be bothered to make the effort to work out what the writer was actually trying to convey. And as I read your 'poem' that was my answer, if you will. You have written with a clear flow, with plenty of white space, with a degree of structure, but also with separation. Your arguments are clear - the reader can understand where you're going. I don't know if it's poetry, but it's a piece of writing that sparks ideas and responses, and that's the important thing.

I think it's good to write 'just to write'. It can produce little seeds, or even just keep the wheels oiled.

Regards
Nigel

Posted 8 Years Ago

Hi there. I was browsing WC, so I dropped by a few acquaintances, and here I am.

It's interesting to see your author's note, because I was balancing two streams of feedback in my head.  One about the subject matter of your piece, and one along the lines of 'why write it at all, or why like this?' as a sort of rhetorical question.

So, as for the subject of the piece, well goodness only knows. 
- Humans have 'invented' Gods and religions, which have fought ideological and bloody wars over many centuries, in some attempt to rationalise all of this, grab power, dominate, be greedy, etc.   
- Stephen King wrote 'Under the dome' where some outside being basically tried an experiment by trapping a community to see what would happen.  
- Scientists theorise about specks of minerals that may have combined in such and such fashion, and are now in raptures about a probe that crashed into a comet.

So that's three example takes on it, and there are several others. Incidentally, you close by intimating that you showed courage to ask, but actually I think millions of people ask and always have done since whenever human existence began.  Maybe in a few millennia's time, someone will figure it out. Till then, well ....

Now the second feedback. Why write this, or in this manner/style.  I just came from reading a piece that was called a 'story'. It was one very very very long paragraph, with several very very very long sentences each containing several clauses. And I basically gave up because I couldn't be bothered to make the effort to work out what the writer was actually trying to convey.  And as I read your 'poem' that was my answer, if you will. You have written with a clear flow, with plenty of white space, with a degree of structure, but also with separation.  Your arguments are clear - the reader can understand where you're going.  I don't know if it's poetry, but it's a piece of writing that sparks ideas and responses, and that's the important thing.

I think it's good to write 'just to write'. It can produce little seeds, or even just keep the wheels oiled.

Regards
Nigel

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