Stoic state of apathy

It's a funny thing that comes and goes
Absorbs my life with mighty blows..
I don't know if it shows
But it always goes
Like this..

Strangest quiet..
I'm oh so calm
Hearts full of sighs it's ticking like a bomb
Thoughts being to riot, where did I go wrong
But I'm overcome with the strangest quiet,
I'm oh so calm

It's driving me nuts where do I belong
My dreams could never come true,
so why do I long
For a life full of meaning, of adventure, of song?
I'm so hopeless, lifeless
The strangest calm

Author's Note

Written in high school.. a little shotty, thinking of editing it.

Reviews

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This is a very lyrical piece of writing.

It certainly has the feel of a piece written by a young person. While appearing slightly disjointed in structure, upon reading it, the poem has a very lyrical style and flow, moving seamlessly in the mind as one reads it.
A very apt title; waiting in a state of calmness while awaiting the coming storm, the uncertainty that the future brings with it.
A very nice poem, A. Marie. Good job.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you very much for your kind comment! I'm glad I never changed this one, because I can hear the young tone and remember what kind of state I was on when I wrote it. I'm glad you appreciated it!

[Nisreen]

I guess we have that calm at a pivotal point in our life
when we dont know what is coming next ..... i like this poem

[A.marie.speaks]

The calm before the storm, perhaps. Glad you enjoyed this one.

[Pete]

I like the style and the flow. You are very clever. "Hearts full of sighs it's ticking like a bomb
Thoughts being to riot, where did I go wrong" - great lines.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you for reading!

[SuspectGray]

Quite a bit of rhyme for free verse. Perhaps your stream of consciousness is more organized than you think

[A.marie.speaks]

I hope so! Thank you for reading.

[Samuel Dickens]

I'm pretty familiar with these kinds of thoughts, and they may be most frequent in the minds of young folks, though anyone might have them. I'm no authority, but think the poem is quite good.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you for reading and your kind comments.

[William Gardner]

Good job. Lose the epilepsies, you don't need.

[A.marie.speaks]

Did you mean ellipsis ? Auto correct mishap perhaps? The repeating oh so calm..? Do you think it is obnoxious, I fought with myself over it because I often find it annoying but this one just came to me in a chunk like this so I ran with it like a mediatiave phrase repetition.. if it's distracting though, maybe I should strip those lines out.

[Autumn Lyric]

Heavy hitting title here! When I was in high school (ages and ages ago :- ) I felt the role of loner, but I knew that I was most passionate with words and writing and getting out the negative in order to create something beautiful, memorable or even universal. The title is a bit misleading, for you are very emotional and passionate in your expressions in this area as well...

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you. I wanted to play a bit on my back and forth emotions and use an ironic, kind of sarcastic title.. as I was, well still am, a sarcastic, morbid type of person. I think that may have been lost in translation though.. but I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Autumn Lyric]

I like the style chosen, brings depth to the piece. Like a puzzle that just needs to be completed in order to get the full picture. Just wanting to let you know that you possess "positive" strengths and ideas, which is the most important thing to recognize within yourself as you are writing. (I am fast becoming your personal cheering section! we all need one sometime)

[A.marie.speaks]

Yeah, we definitely all can use a cheering section once in a while, thank you for that! I always appreciate your comments!

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poetry.
"My dreams could never come true,
so why do I long
For a life full of meaning, of adventure, of song?
I'm so hopeless, lifeless
The strangest calm "
If we are lucky. We keep the dreams of youth. When we forget or lose our dreams. What is left? I liked the above lines. Good to be a dreamer. Keep the heart and mind hopeful. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[A.marie.speaks]

I'm still dreaming and hoping. Thank you for reading and commenting!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[alifeacoustic]

Great title. Reminds me of teenage years, lying on my bed, for all the world looking like I couldn't move if an earthquake hit, but inside I was a tornado of thoughts and worries. Some things change, others don't. I still have those moments, though they are fewer and farther apart.
The strangest calm is a perfect end line. Sums it up perfectly.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you. Good to know I wasn't the only one feeling like this.