The Unappreciated Me

I'm a fine girl, yet no one ever liked me back.

"I like you." Those words came from my mouth without even thinking. I don't want to say those words but my heart decided to anyways. I felt like crying. His eyes were pinpointed to mine. Maybe his mind is full of thoughts like "what is she saying?" and such. I turned my back and was about to run but he said, "Sorry, I like someone else. We're best friends, right? How did this happen?" My heart was wrecked. It felt like my heart was ripped into pieces. 

I took all my strength to step forward and ran away. 

What's the problem with me? Am I not attractive? Am I not smart? Am I not... Oh... I forgot an important thing. I am not that "someone" he likes, that's why. I am not her, that's why. It hurts so much. 

The next day, I decided not to talk to him. I just want to be with myself. But he's too rude, too ignorant. 

He kept on bugging me, talking to me, and pestering me like nothing happened. I had enough and I can't control this anger anymore. "Would you just shut up?! Stop acting chummy with me!" I guess, that hit him hard. He was speechless and I can say that the atmosphere became heavy. 

All he can say was another "sorry". 

I stood up and walk away. I can't face him anymore. Is it wrong for me to love him? Maybe no. 

I guess, I just fell in love with the wrong person in a wrong time. 

Author's Note

I am open for any criticisms. Please do correct any errors particularly in grammar and in constructing sentences. Thank you! <3

Reviews

[_nymphofthecross_]

I thought you used the breaks between paragraphs very well. I also like the idea of a heart being wrecked; like a ship. Very original! The mixture of internal and external dialogue is fantastic. With some words I think the tense is a little funny, run(in paragraph two) would be ran, can't (in five) would be couldn't, can (in six) would be could. I hope this helps!

[Amara'sPen]

Oh! Thank you so much for the corrections and review! So happy that you have read it :)

[JMKane117]

Everyone's been in that position, but most people don't talk about it, let alone write about it. Great work. I included a few corrections in the brackets below that you might want to change or not.

I don't want to say those (words) but my heart decided to (anyways)

Ps. I hope you can come by my page and read one of mine and let me know what you think. I'd love to hear your thoughts!

[Amara'sPen]

Thank you so much for the corrections and review! I appreciated it a lot!

[Wordzika]

'' i just fell in love with the wrong person at a wrong time''
the words wrap around the profound bleeding of the aching heart! Self-doubt coupled with anger and the feeling of being 'unimportant', this is what rejection entails. Your story rings true to the ears, rightfully so!

[Amara'sPen]

Oh~ Thank you for that review~ ^0^

[Coyote Poetry]

A good story with a sad ending.
"I stood up and walk away. I can't face him anymore. Is it wrong for me to love him? Maybe no.
I guess, I just fell in love with the wrong person in a wrong time. "
Love is timing and people wanting the same things. Better to learn sooner than later. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Amara'sPen]

Thank you for the review! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.