Adore

My first poem

Adore  

A man I know is 5ft11 an average height for a man

Not above or below average weight for a man of his age

Dark pretty blue eyes that one can only call beady

Remarks tend to be tedious, essentially he is a pest

Eventually he lay down and a crow danced on the sides of his eyes

When he woke with messy black hair I was impatient to run my fingers through it.

So I lie when his smokers kiss kissed me and I failed to be tied to him.

I’ll be your Lolita and you’ll be my Humbert Humbert we’ll spend our days together in secret

Don’t blank out our spent and blood the perfect mix of desire.

 

Author's Note

Would like to hear your views negative or postive! (:

Reviews

[Xardalas]

Interesting. It doesn't really flow that well together as a poem but I enjoyed reading it nonetheless.

[Amanda-xx]

Thanks and yes it was my first poem but there is always time to improve (:

[Xardalas]

Not bad for a first attempt. :)

[Amanda-xx]

Thank you could you look at my short story Alice in Negative i would like to know what you think (:

[Jeleseka]

That was wonderful. I enjoyed reviewing it! I think this could have been better, yes. But if you like it, then you, are a true writer!

[Amanda-xx]

Thank you (: