Like Snow

Like Snow

 

I wish to be silent,

Like snow.

I wish to be still,

Like snow.

I wish to be serene,

Like snow.

I wish to be a surprise,

Like snow.

I hope to bring peace,

Like snow.

My soul longs to be danced in,

Like snow.

I bid you come,

Abandon your burdens,

Spin in jubilation,

Excite in childlike curiosity.

Laugh while I kiss your face,

Like snow.

 

Author's Note

I wrote this at a recent poetry night a friend hosted. We drew words from a hat and then we all wrote about that one word. Snow was the word, we had 5 minutes. This is what I wrote. Ironically, it was the first day of snow on the mountains surrounding my home.

Reviews

[Minnie]

Amazing, it is short and sweet, it is just lovely, a new fav

[Everett DeValle]

Wow, this is an amazing poem, Amadon, the flow was perfect, and in five minutes with only using the subject snow...I don't think I would have came up with a poem like yours by a mile, on how perfect you wrote this.

[realmwriter]

This is very good man. You spin the reader around with you in the snow, playing as children do. It reminds me of my childhood one day in Clear Lake California, during a very heavy snowfall. The flakes outside my window were Ginormas. The snow got really deep that night and we dug tunnels through it the next morning. I always love that about snow playing in it makes me feel like a kid again, so did this poem. Thank You...!

[DeleVan Sonta-an DellEr..]

This is incredibly beautiful brother...you took a simple concept and made profound metaphor with it!

[Wolfwind]

While I may not like to drive in the snow... I loved what you did with the word in this poem. For a 5 minute spin of the ink, you crafted a beautiful flowing piece that captures an essence of peace, joy and exaltation. Awesome Ink!

Aaron

[Enigma]

You created a beautiful poem in those five minutes. This is going in my personal favourites. Snow, or maybe a single snow flake gets this power through your words and gets a meaning for its existence. I am impressed and awed. Outstanding work.