Cleansing rain

For those of you who love to dance in the rain~

Tilting my head
Cool drops of rain
Wash tears away
Clean away all the pain

Calm washes over me
Feeling the rain’s embrace
My soul rises
Caresses on my face

Lightning flashes
Chorus of renewal begins
Thunder rolls
I begin to spin

Twirl and whirl
Sigh and giggle
Pirouette and leap
Stomp and wiggle

Huff and puff
Spin and spin
Laughing and dizzy
Time to go in

Drenched and spent
I seek indoors
But quickly I curtsy
I will remember you forever more

Light is my heart
Light is my soul
Thank you dear rain
For you have made me whole

Author's Note

This is a rewrite of a poem I wrote on Gather.

Reviews

[Bennett Logan]

I like this poem: short, simple, dancing in the rain. You can't go wrong. I only have a couple suggestions, though. In line 14, "Sigh and giggle," the word "sigh" doesn't seem to fit... This poem is so jubilant, nothing about it makes me want to sigh. The same goes for line 17: "Huff and puff" has an almost exasperated feel and, again, that's the last thing I feel when reading this. Thanks for posting this! I truly enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.

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[Arsalan...]

this is amazing
we all love rain, don't we?!

[Arsalan...]

this is amazing
we all love rain, don't we?!

[Dalaina Renee]

A writer is one whom writes well. So, you are called a writer! Good job! I enjoyed this one!

[Elsie Duggan]

This is beautiful , I am bringing some of my things over here too. Your poem made me think of how it is to feel the rain on my face, even now, it is refreshing, brings y our spirit alive.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

The first two stanzas are incredibly powerful. They give this peice incredible strength. I really like this poem. It's like part two of my poem, "Delverance" I wonder if we were standing on oppositte sides of a building in the same storm.

[Dani California]

Ohh... I like! :)
I love to dance,
and I love the rain,
and I love to dance...
in the rain..
therefore,
making this..
a favorite! :)

Thank you!
I live in Hawaii now
and we have frequent
"sprinkles" but not enough
to really soak it up... lol
So this gave my imagination
something to play with!

Wonderful! :)

Great form, good choice of words, well painted imagery.

The message is exhibited well in the last stanza, it jives well as an the initial message imparted. A good closing and great flow.

A wonderful piece

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very enjoyable read. Dancing in the rain sounds wonderful. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Jason]

This was an enjoyable write! Keep it up.