At the end of the day...

The ending of a day

*Groan*

End of the day

drawing near

stress and strain

evident and clear

 

 

*Gasp*

WOW

how can it be

I am Blessed

red, yellow, blue and green

 

 

*Mmm*

Bathed in light

night cools with a light caress

life seems to draw still

melting away duress

 

 

*Sigh*

There it goes

splended and full of glory

full of fire and life

this is the sun's story

Author's Note

Just a quick poem to say hello. Enjoy~
Edited to better emphasis on *sounds* Thanks Bennett :)

Reviews

[Dani California]

This is lovely Jerri...

"*Mmm*
Bathed in light
night cools with a light caress
life seems to draw still
melting away duress"

So perfect.
Very calming effect
Nature and all of its
wonderous glory...
putting everything
back into perspective
at the end of the day.

Thank you for this burst of sunshine! :)

[Lucinda Bogart]

Sweet, simple, and delightful....a nice feel-good that is welcome at this time of night !!

[Bennett Logan]

You paint a happy and light picture here, and I thank you for that. This is not one of those heavy, morose poems I run into on here so often. Anyway, I've had many similar evenings so I can certainly relate to your sentiments here. It's definately better to leave one day's events behind with that day, and you've made the point very clear. Excellent work.

The only thing that threw me off a little were the verbs/onomatopoeias enclosed in asterisks. Maybe it was just the asterisks. I dunno. If I were to revise the poem, I would most likely do something to this effect:

Groan.
End of the day
drawing near
stress and strain
evident and clear

I hope my suggestion can be of some use. I really enjoyed this poem, and I'll definately be reading more of your writing. Keep up the good work!

[Wildfleour]

I did enjoy! Thank you!

[she makes me weird]

This piece has a light, happy feel to it for me. It brings to me a sigh of relief that another day is passing and I"m still alive to feel it all. I enjoyed.

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

wow, a wonderful piece of work. i really like how you made it feel like all the stress during the day can sometimes end up in a little bit of beauty. i love it. :D

[Brandon]

Nicely done. Know how you feel with this one.

[Elsie Duggan]

this is a day described very quickly and it is bright and colorful as well, I enjoyed your poem Jerri,
thank you for your comment on mine. Elsie Duggan

[Legacy]

Jerri,

Welcome to Writers Caf� and Thank You for joining Poetic Infusion Society we are excited to have you.

The asterisks are a nice and unique touch. Brings in realism to everyday life we can all relate to.

Nicely Done�

Legacy

[WritefromtheHeart]

Well look at you....I love it!! The end of the day can be so stressful...and a little relaxation is exactly what you need. Nothing like a lovely sunset to do that, huh ;-) Glad you're here Jerri!!