No Secret (Temporary Title)

Half his wardrobe's from a t-shirt gun.

He starts family feuds just for some fun.

Cigarette smoke follows him around

And he won't put the toilet seat down.

He can never control his daughter.

His wife wants things he's never bought her.

His son's almost as bad as he is

And his father isn't a math whiz.

It's no secret that he drinks too much.

He can silence you with just one touch.

He has never been dedicated

And he won't ever be educated.

He might know his life is a lost cause.

But he still wants to be his own boss.

He will never ever change one bit

And that's just the way that he likes it.

Author's Note

I've been wanting to use that first line for awhile now...

Please suggest a better title if you can.

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Kasey,

I read this a couple times and have been thinking of a title, but I can't get "Uncle Jack" out of my head. I don't know. Does it fit? Hell if I know.

I enjoyed reading this. It was comical and entertaining. But I can't get passed a name for the title and it continues to fill my head.

Regards,

Matthew

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. You described a man with great lines and story. I have known many in my life like this man. We got along because I like men or woman who hide nothing and will tell you the truth. I like the total poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem. Remind me of the song. I did my way. Hell bound and don't give a s**t.
Coyote

[Kirbetsy]

I like this a lot. The first line is great. I agree with Rosalyn it could totally be a song

[Jong Schrijver]

I like this one. I like it a lot. The last stanza is my favorite

[Rosalyn Marie]

really really good :D and i do love the first line :) if you added a chorus in between the stanzas this could totally be an awesome song :D

[Michael X]

i thought the title was perfect, thats just me, this is sentimental,
and draws on the depth and aspect of memories, revelations and secrets,
an all around excellent poem