Some Great Truth

This is a revised and hopefully much better version of a poem I wrote for 7th grade English using words cut out newspaper headlines. I didn't like the original version since I had to dumb it down.

Students work to move a quitting city.

Jazz is lost

And openly mourned.

Monsters roam the streets.

They aim to terrify.

Petrify.

Glorify, justify.

Art is charged with energy

To catch a grand eye.

We are ready. I can feel it in the air.

The stage is set.

Upgrade to the desensitized life.

Feel the transformation.

Let the changes control you.

Introducing: the way it is.

Author's Note

Here's the original version if you're interested. Keep in mind it was using cutouts of words from newspaper headlines so it's kinda choppy.
Some selected students work to move a quitting city.
Jazz is lost
Art is charged with energy
To catch a grand eye.
The stage is set.
Upgrade to the showbiz life.
Everything else is rough.
Introducing the flock.

Reviews

[Sam Cambell]

Good job. I hate school assigned poems, especially ones with tough criteria like this. You did a good job with it though, although I agree, the new one's definetely better. "Jazz is lost, and openly mourned." I love those lines because they flow really well with the rest of the poem. Keep it up.

[Ruth]

A great poem love that delivers a wonderful message!
So many people fear the changes that take over!
Great poem
xx

[Michael X]

this looks like a fun way of expressing poetry, the entire design seems to be
an artful intention, the meaning is all around, the way each sentence links
to the next, and the poem feels exactly as it reads.
like an artzy energitic mishmash, awsome job

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Kasey,

I too like the new, more mature version of the poem. Although very impressive coming from cuts outs. Impressed as always I do look forward to many many more from you.

So much truth is lost in the everyday life that we allow the lies to become the norm. Why? Why do we continue to accept this? Why do we continue to allow this to occur? It's a society that spurs people like myself who either rape the lands of everything innocent and soon lost....or rape our minds from pure passion.

We accept it because......it's interesting.

Always,

Matthew

[Rosalyn Marie]

really nice and its such a great message that the arts are really important in schools and not enogh people know that. i did this exact same assignment for english last year but i never finished mine because i didnt need it for my portfolio...haha o well anyway very good job :D

[Jong Schrijver]

Cool poem. I definitely think the new version is better tho. Great job