I've Been Good

Hmm...

I'm telling you, I've been good.

I've been getting straight As like you said I could.

But I'm clinging to that one last thread,

One tiny grain of hope. Without it, I'd lose my head.

Now that I've grown up, kept my chin up high,

Can you make me a promise? Please don't lie.

Can you come back and be good, too? No more thugs,

No more scared eyes glazed with drugs.

Author's Note

Seems like it ended too soon, but it's all I wanted to say.

Reviews

[Rosalyn Marie]

same as always great :)

[Brittany W]

i enjoyed this, i feel like i can relate to this poem, great write.

[wolfshrew]

I read this title as, "I've been god"
and then I actually realised I misread.
Thats really not important though,
there was such good flow in my opinion.
it did seem to end so soon though,
leaving me not know where to go next.
maybe that was the point though,
sometimes thats the point.

[Rosalyn Marie]

very nice :) i read this and i want to know the story behind it (dont actually answer that tho) so my way of thinking is that the parent was sent to prison for something drug related when the child was in like middle school, and they stayed with family throuh high school and did well, and now the parent is being released and the child is talking to them... so ya :) nice job

[Gianna Perry]

The rhythm bounces around a little bit, but it still has a pretty good flow to it. It tells a really strong story with so few words. The vocabulary is good for the vibe I'm getting - to me, it seems that the beginning is a small child, but as they grow up (into the second stanza) they realize that the adult (parent, older sibling, etc.) hasn't been practicing what they preach. Even if that wasn't what you were exactly shooting for, it's still really good with the idea behind it. I like it a lot :)

Another good job,
~Shayna R.

[Jong Schrijver]

Not your best. I like it but it seems like it's missing something.

[Kirbetsy]

Makes me think of parents or even a big brother who tells you to be good but then isn't good themselves

[Alex Thomas]

It has a good rhythm and a simplistic rhyme. You could liven up the language a bit, but it has meaning so I think you're fine. Good job.