Disease; Late Night Ramblings

This isn't about insomnia, but I wrote this around 1AM, and it actually makes some sense.

Dis-Ease.

So life won't be so easy anymore.

I'll say. We're begging for your life like we're poor.

"Please, just one more chance."

He mumbles, in a trance.

In a chair, in the corner,

Isolated but still motivated.

War rages in the air,

While the room sleeps, without a care.

For now, forgetting that fear is there.

When we awaken,

Our hope is taken,

Replaced with cold reality.

The war was won by these dark thoughts,

Growing like a tumor,

Killing all we had clung to.

The truth hurts,

But it could be worse.

We begin our goodbyes,

Buzzing like flies,

Keeping things pleasant,

Telling ourselves that life goes on.

Then, suddenly, you're gone.

Author's Note

This type of situation hasn't happened for me, yet.
This poem wasn't really meant to be structured in terms of the number of lines in a stanza. It's kind of random.

If you're going to read this, please review it! I need feedback, so let me know how I'm doing!

Reviews

[Loner]

U are doing great keep up the good work plz .

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very interesting. I could feel a battle and the knowing of upcoming defeat. I like the strong language and the internal story in your words. A powerful poem. You made me think. Thank you.
Coyote

[Ruth]

You know, this is excellent!
The poignancy is so powerful, the world is always best put to rights at 1 am! lol
Awesome!
xx

[Gianna Perry]

Don't you love writing at 1 AM? I think that's the best way to write.

This is really great. The lack of any sort of rhythm is very organized, somehow, and it still really flows well. iMe gusta mucho!

[Jong Schrijver]

Good poem. The stanzas are all different yet it still flows very nicely. You have created, yet again, another amazing poem.

[OkieWonKenokie]

I love the flow of this and i like how some lines rhyme but then some don't. Great Job!

[Kirbetsy]

This is really good, especially for being written at 1 A.M. The random numbers of lines in the stanzas gives it that feeling you have when you can't sleep.

[Alex Thomas]

I like it. The choppiness really makes it unique. It almost gives one that exhausted delirious feeling when we're deprived of sleep and one gets punchy.