Midnight Trickery

Nobody likes admitting that they're afraid of the dark, but it happens to everyone.

Under my eyelids,

I see peace.

Meadows and sunsets,

These are my dreams.

But when I awake,

In the midst of the darkness.

My ears hear things

That bring horror.

An innocent creak,

The wind's serenade.

These can all make me afraid.

So I pull up the blankets,

And squeeze my eyes shut.

Sleep comes soon,

But it seems like forever.

The morning sun greets me 

With a smiling face.

I'm ready to start my day.

When you see the day in full light,

It no longer gives you a fright.

Author's Note

This poem doesn't really flow. Suggestions?

Reviews

[Gomer LePoet]

Actually, although unbalanced, the first 3 1/2 verses paint a great picture. the ending kinda comes to a thud. look at it again and try some different endings.
poetry/prose never has a date to be completed by attached.

[Rosalyn Marie]

i think it flows pretty well especially the 3rd stanza i love that one :) the only thing is some words rhyme but i cant find a set rhyme scheme....

[Alex Thomas]

The poem flows very smoothly. You may want to change TV's speak to something in nature like owls or something that sounds better than owls...