About Out

About Out

A Poem by Alpris

One girl and a wall

she comes out, it's expected

and the door groans light

© 2012 Alpris


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Spectacular hiaku! There are so many different ways of interpreting and imagining this poem its amazing! I'm sitting here just thinking up different stories about the girl, I'm not sure if you had one, but if you do I'd love to read it! Simply amazing. I love it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Powerful words in such a short verse.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Reminds me of a childbirth

Posted 12 Years Ago


Spectacular hiaku! There are so many different ways of interpreting and imagining this poem its amazing! I'm sitting here just thinking up different stories about the girl, I'm not sure if you had one, but if you do I'd love to read it! Simply amazing. I love it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You create a world of what was and what is, all in three hushed-brief lines... It feels like a freedom and a binding all at once... Beautifully done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I feel like you want to say more here, but the brevity is still the statement you feel needs to be made. She is a brave one. good write

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The sad sound from the door reflects the pain or unhappiness of the girl. It's beautiful ! I like this three line modern haiku. My best wishes.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Alpris
Alpris

Auckland, New Zealand



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