The Crickets and Her

The Crickets and Her

A Poem by Alpris

the lullabies
of the many crickets outside
who can't seem to sing themselves to sleep

they scream ruthlessly,
chirping
twittering 
singing
cheeping and
peeping through 
champagne and wasabi Paihia grass
as her and I
-we slide into bed together.



in Paihia the wind rains down
from the star-saturated sky
with twinkles
 tatters and
invisible snowflakes, girl it's cold tonight
and all we can hear
are the crickets in the solitary valley
with the moonlight
snoring soundly on our duvet


I don't,
but she drowses and
 lets out a toneless whistle;
that fingers a yearning melody
along my heartstrings
 her attic is closed for the night
but not the staircase
that leads me to her rooted river
she rolls over, to kiss the wall
and through her dark
wavy charcoal hair
I see her shoulders
rise
          and
                  fall
like my earthquake maintenance



she rolls over again, to
watch me behind
closed eyes, her lips unlatched as
she lets out a doze-ridden purr
that bends into a gentle moan
like an ocean's rush and gush of waves
creaming the tanned sand
and
she takes it in through her mouth
all of it, until she releases
an uttered groan, like
the creak of a safe door
that hides treasures beyond
a mortal's worth



her
stainless face
now contorted into
a dream's sneer of steel
I hold no fear for
the glistening 
fangs of lust that
have morphed themselves
into my mind, she breathes 
againagain
she does, and I do
but
with a submissive sigh that
matches her wardrobe
of fitting murmurs
I drift....



and I dream of her
inside of her
next to her
in the bach with her
in love with her
at last with her
feeling her
 I wake up 
next to her



to find the crickets have fallen asleep.






 

© 2012 Alpris


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First off I love the form... Defiantly a sucker for unusual forms. Now the crickets.. I really like how you started with them and ended with them. This really set the tone for me. I could really hear them screaming and then as the poem progressed they lightened up and then with the ending. Awesome well written work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is really an awesome poem. You have used so much imagery in this poem that I could see everything. The ending was also awesome, I love how you brought it back to the beginning, mentioning the crickets. Very cool effect!

Posted 12 Years Ago


First off I love the form... Defiantly a sucker for unusual forms. Now the crickets.. I really like how you started with them and ended with them. This really set the tone for me. I could really hear them screaming and then as the poem progressed they lightened up and then with the ending. Awesome well written work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hey, Ali Cloud.
I thought the same about the screaming part too, but I decided to keep it in there because its meant to emphasize how quiet the night is and how loud they seem in the silence and the contentedness with her and I.
Otherwise, thank you all for your reviews! Greatly appreciated.

-Misty

Posted 12 Years Ago


this is gorgeous. You create such intricate images in your poems, I love it.
the only thing is I'm not sure about "they scream ruthlessly," cause it just doesn't have the feel of screaming to it and crickets are more of a hum or something. I am in love with the line "champagne and wasabi Paihia grass" just cause it's so unexpected but works really well.

Posted 12 Years Ago


A visually breathtaking poem.. such an intense complexity to the poem that expresses emotions on many levels.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paihia is a place north of Auckland in New Zealand.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nice story lines behind the curtains of the poem...... wats actually paihia???

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I love the formatting of the poem, and how it seems to just flow off the page. Also your use of color and varrying spaces is excellent. Well done :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is beautiful. I love this type of story poem and one that uses the natural surroundings intricately woven into as an essential part of the story itself. Here the noisy crickets intrude on what should be a dreamy night. And it is the crickets that introduce the exotic location and the two dreamers (one sleeping and one not) cuddled against the cold and against one another. Each verse captures different moments coloring each one subtle tones changing with the ever changing moonlight.

I love ...

peeping through champagne and wasabi Paihia grass

with the moonlight snoring soundly

her attic is closed for the night but not the staircase

her stainless face now contorted into a dream's sneer of steel

And the closing verse that could be a standalone poem by itself. This is a beautiful poem that captures not only the night filled with dreams but also one of love and desire. Sleeping Beauty and the patient Princess who waits to awaken her with a magical kiss.



Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is breath taking : I love it ! I'm going to read some more...

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Alpris

Auckland, New Zealand



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