optimistic daisies

i tell myself:
there will be an end to my guttered mind
i will soon see the gap in which the current tumbles


but my mind,
it likes to drag itself out ; prolonged thoughts
like tired red carpet for the trampling and marvel


i tell myself:
these thoughts, ill let them ponder then die
like a wingless bird stranded in lava lands

       and those yellow and orange tongues
they skin me raw once again


but my mind,
is a fascinating procrastination
of a whirlwind of horror

beauty;
in its own existence. i'll let it live
like optimistic daisies on a lone field of graves

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I like the last stanza and the hope it brings. We have so many thoughts sometimes, but in a state of peace, we can find space to think and dream.

[Ninepointzero]

F****n awesome

[MaryCherrieJane]

Nothing short of amazing. I love your writing style.

[Flo_writer]

I myself am not a stranger to wasted thoughts due to procrastination. This also remines me of writers block for some reason. Maybe because a sit around and waste my good ideas and when i take the time to create something I'm stuck. I'm constantly frustrated at myself for being lazy. I love this line

"tell myself:these thoughts, ill let them ponder then die like a wingless bird stranded in lava lands"

[Melobldnfr]

Standing in a crowded room, yet feeling all alone as the whispers of silly/tenacious knits eat at you, keeping you from flying? This is what I get from this piece. And that, yes, there can be optimisim even in the valley. Xo. Good write!

[MoriartyMesa]

For some reason my mind reached to The Rolling Stones while reading this. Like a flash back to beat poetry of San Francisco ala 62

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A great poem, I really love that last verse...

beauty;
in its own existence. i'll let it live
like optimistic daisies on a lone field of graves

seeing the good in a bad situation shows strong character.

[Allycat]

wow, honestly I'm breathless. What an extraordinary write! :D I really love this, you have an incredible talent

[Alpris]

Thank you Ally :) such high praise for little old me. Greatly appreciated

[Allycat]

no problem :D