valleys & thunder

she came last night;
she on iron bloodied wings
cut through; a sharp
angled blade of the night sky's sheet
because I called
   out to her
to make her mine
she made me hers;
f**k yes, oh yes,
you like it, don't you
                        you little b***h!
grunting;   aged
flax on coffee cream
       and parting flairs
of chocolate red
      affairs; the
maniacs in action /


I kissed
  grooves of
delicate blushing
         daffodil plains;
her aching fingertips
  pulsated through
sterile bars against my back:
mmmh, you don't make a
  damn noise
              S**T
until I say you can
no one here
cares for danger
they live for it
just like you do
on  earthquaking valleys
with hot shudders
          southern winds
thunder            storms /

giving way to
   parting shivering
slippery slopes of
     hell's gush /

her bended knee
met
the tip of
the volcano, fed
the volcano's
screaming stomach
     and she let me /

lubricated toffee
    marked its territory
she left me with
cascading blondes
                            and blacks /

i saw the end of
      the milky way
where she
  bounced from
before I woke up
  and realized
my pulse never stopped
  running either /

Reviews

[cilla]

Before I woke up!!!! UGH!!! What a tease. This is one very hot bad girl dream/poem. The writing and imagery is exceptional. I love the way you introduced this and never looked back. "no one here / cares for danger / they live for it" ... Amen.

You never fail to surprise and delight. Thanks for one breathtaking ride.

[Alpris]

Thank you, Cilla :) your review is appreciated dearly. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, as I was thinking of you as I wrote it.

[cilla]

Thinking of me? What a wonderful compliment ... thank you! You do possess a wonderfully original vision in your work ... and that trully is a gift.

[Alpris]

Yes, thinking of you. I know you appreciate highly erotic writing. Thank you, dear :) It's great that someone truly likes my work and admires it.

[Melobldnfr]

Wow. Umm..."her bended knee/met/the tip of/the volcano, fed/the volcano's/screaming stomach/and she let me/..." blew me away. Also, some of the color references like "...coffee cream/and parting flairs/of chocolate red/affairs..." had me picturing the beauty of light skin on dark skin, and the equal blush of intimate regions. Again with "cascading blondes/and blacks/". Also, that finger tips can ache...I so just really REALLY like this! Speaks to me of some one I've been talking to. Xo. Not to mention Cilla and Maryanne! ;-) Thanks for sharing!

[Alpris]

Ah thank you, darling! I'm glad you admire and appreciate this piece. You were so right with the light skin on the darker skin, I was waiting for someone to pick up on that :) Thank you for your very kind words! As you can see there is one person on here who does not agree with my choice of words but that comment is insignificant and fueled by a grudge. Thank you also for reading :)

[Androglossia]

she came last night;
she on iron bloodied wings
cut through; a sharp
angled blade of the night sky's sheet
because I called
out to her

This sounded more like a cult to me. You summoned the succubus and offered yourself to her for power. And there came Cilla:) descending from the sky, hungry and powerful ready to take the offering. And the ceremony began. While I was in the middle of the crowd of the fanatic followers as they shouted their incantation, their ancient chant, while you and your Goddess made love convulsively. I, unknown, unseen. Watching for one wrong move. Lol, it's absurd, I know. But that's how I looked at it.

Disturbing, orgasmic, frustrating. This write is beyond ordinary.

[Alpris]

Funny you say it sounded like a cult... the woman in the affair is that of a similar figure. Not exactly, but close.
And wow! Thanks for that lovely review, it was intense and quite flattering. I've never seen someone analyze my work like that before, I don't think.

[Mark D]

Brilliant writing. Very racy and daring.

Would be easy to focus on the theme of this only and miss how good the words themselves are.

"lax on coffee cream
and parting flairs
of chocolate red
affairs; the
maniacs in action /"

For example is tremendously put. Well done!