In The End

Possessive skies fight,
Over precious populations;
Yet surrounding are dying, writhering colonies.
But, it will only be a temporary win.
Cause everything, in the end,
Will cease to survive.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading and reviewing, I'll happily take any constructive critism you may have, and work more on my writing. Thank you.

Reviews

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

"Possessive skies fight,
Over precious populations"... it had me at hello. lol Thought evoking and in so few lines, well done.

[Alone In A Crowd]

Thank you very much for your review.

[Rahul]

That's really a great write and add few more lines...i wanna read :)
this piece lost me into a other world where i', alone and think alone, speak alone, walk alone but feel not alone but feel with the end...! Nice work this time, you got me and really you're reaching out fastly...but as a criticism as you mentioned in author's note that you want cuz..you need, so, i wanna say, try to read more and more books, you've some errors in your grammar...not much..but in your third line...
"YET SURROUNDING ARE DYING"...that's not grammatically correct...you can write or replace it with this line "YET SURROUNDINGS ARE DYING"..or you can write "YET SURROUNDING IS DYING"...
sorry, if i hurt you ...by this but i think you wanted this :) to improve yourself....

anyway, apart from this single error, i loved youse whole poem and i loved youse theme too...99/100

[Alone In A Crowd]

Thank you very much for your review Rahul, i'll work on my grammer, and have a very enjoyable homework task to complete. I'll definately take on board what you said for future poems. Thank you.

[Water_Lilly]

Its a nice one. Makes me think of how greed overtakes our sence of living that before we enjoy anything accumulated, everything ceases to live.

[Alone In A Crowd]

Thank you very much.

[Anna a. S.M.]

Oh yes, it reminds me of many situations where you think that this is your end ... but it isn't.
I like it!

[Alone In A Crowd]

Thank you

[Cool Handless Luke]

Just keep them coming "AIAC" keep them coming. Write it all down. We all survive until we don't. I cannot tell you how many times I found myself at what I thought was my end only to find that it was just something that made me so much more stronger. Vent and rage in your craft here but don't be the creator taking refuge in his creation. Experience and live it for what you must but rise about it and step upon new paths . I have a friend on here named Gracie Lou who was always trying to teach me this. She is a great writer in her own right. Keep writing....and keep rising. The old saying....fall down 9 times, and get up ten.

[Alone In A Crowd]

Thank you for your review, there always nice to get. I'll definately be trying to experience life more, because that's what I do, hide and wear a mask by delving deep into the words on my page. Love the saying, and I'll be using it from now on. Plus I'll look up Gracie Lou. Thank you once again for your review.

[Aunre]

Yes, now that's my kind of despair and disillusionment. We're all alone in the crowd; so what's so precious about the populations? By the way, I don't think "writhering" is a real word, is it? Perhaps a smash up of writhe and wither; right/wrong? Oh, I know you can't tell but I did like it... soul suckage and all. :)

[Alone In A Crowd]

Thank you for your review, and I have a habbit of making up words so I wouldn't be too suprised if I made a word up. Oh, I guess despair is my genre.

[Aunre]

I too love to make up words, especially when their isn't a good one within reach.

[Alone In A Crowd]

Most definately

[Madison O'Dwyer]

Wow, I love this poem. It's really powerful and thought provoking but not too long winded. Thanks for sharing :)

[Alone In A Crowd]

Thank you for your review xxx