Savior.

More paragraphs about a traumatic event, that occured during my childhood. It's similar to my other piece.

 A piece of her weakens each time she groans in her memory. Her name ignites her throat with itching, burning and leaves lacerated, scarred skin. "Be quiet,dear, wait."

She smothers her in that place, until it's okay to scream.

 

          Motions freeze when thoughts flutter to her. She becomes a part of her, an evil twin. We're entwined here, in this hell together. We're crippled. We have our secrets, but

I

can't

hurt

him

to heal our wounds.

 

 She can't survive here long. She's sick. His disease spreads inside her, coating her heart in restlessness. It smolders underneath her skin, waiting for that moment to disrupt life and tear down a contaminated body and a shattered escence.

 

      Choked with aprehension, she drowns in his venom. Thoughts slam and bruise her listless, delapitated body. Thoughts race through nerves. Iciness screams disregard, an unhappiness

never

imagined.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Italic words make a sentance. Suggestions on how to make this better? Thanks.

Reviews

[RAWR!]

this was well written, you have a good way with words, and i like how you organized the piece. i do not think this is the kind of piece one can criticize since its clearly you processing emotions/events.
i dont know if i understand what its about, or perhaps i do know what it is about, anyway, have a good day, and thank you for sharing -- keep on writing.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such an overwhelming feeling of pain here.. the darkness washing over. Your form and flow add to this sense of alienation and anxiety.