Dionysia

Sipping from the glorious amphora,

full of sweet grape wine

and glowing gold.

We glow ourselves,

violet flowers in our hair,

hair turning into finely spun gold itself.

"Gather round young maenads,

listen to that I have to say!

My name is Dionysus

and we are here today

to drink of sweet grape juices,

the grapes grown in my field.

Their sweetness, oh so divine,

immortalize us in our youth,

our aging will then yield."

We listened closely,

his madness so intoxicating,

our heads light and spinning

after having sipped so sweetly.

The glorious amphora,

golden as our hair.

The wine itself as violet

as the flowers in our hair.

Author's Note

Not sure what I like about this one. Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Joe Morris]

Who doesn't like getting a bit tipsy! I thought it was an excellently crafted poem. You're incredibly gifted as a poet and i would suggest publishing some of your works as i always have a great time reading. Well done :)

[Hester Vane]

I think its great! As i have said to you before, i love your work becuase you combine real folklore and myths into your work! The second stanza feels like it come have come directly from a greek story! Well done

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thanks so much Vane! Honestly I think the old myths are an essential part of literature today. Implementing them into my own writing is just my form of tribute!

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We glow ourselves,
violet flowers in our hair,
Reminds me of the days I went to the field with my BFF Violet
100/100

[Soul Fire]

I like this

[Steven Cash]

I loved it. Reminds me of 'From Finner' by Of Monsters and Men

sort of that everybody having fun around some wine and having a good time in Ye Old England

Something is always reminding me of something else lol

[Allyson Wolfe]

I'm glad it puts you back in an older time! That's what I was going for.

[Steven Cash]

Yep yep

[Justin]

I like how the poem cycles back and uses some of the phrases from the beginning at the end. That's cool. I think if you change the first line to: "We sipped..." instead of sipping, it could give the poem more energy (that might make you have to do a little editing, but it's just a suggestion). The line last line of the first stanza could be its own sentence if you changed it to: "Our hair turns into finely spun gold."

Those are just suggestions, though. I enjoyed your poem. Keep writing!

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you much!! Do you have any idea on the name then? I could use help with that one.

[Justin]

It could be something simple like "Golden Dionysus" or "Dionysia" (which is an ancient Greek festival dedicated to Dionysus). I don't know. Those are some ideas.

[Allyson Wolfe]

I like the idea of Dionysia. Hmm, thanks!