This Heart of Mine

The things you've done with this heart of mine,

well they won't be justified.

So as I sit here, all alone,

see yourself on your "power throne".

You, a king?

Don't make me laugh.

A crown of foil,

a pipe? Your staff.

The things you did with this heart of mine.

Reviews

[TLK]

Wow. This is really quite raw. The juxtaposition of regal terminology and imagery with the reality really hit me from "power throne". For a moment I thought you were havin' a larf but then I saw a sad, unkempt dude playing games in his underpants one of those special gaming chairs. (People with those chairs must love their butt too much).

From then on, the whole thing clicked. This vignette really means that, by the time you get to the repetition of the first line, you feel a real sense of empathy for the heart-hurt court jester.

[Allyson Wolfe]

That's sort of what I was trying to portray! A man who thinks his like is perfect, and that he's royalty; his life is nothing special. Thank you so much for review! Much appreciated!

[Kyle]

so sad. Yet this so identifiable to nearly all who will read and enjoy this...

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you!

[Kyle]

I'm sorry about this situation.....

[Allyson Wolfe]

It's no bother. It always works out in the end.

[.]

You, a king?
Don't make me laugh.
I think I already laughed.
100/100 Don't give up!

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you!

[.]

you're welcome