The Wolf

Caged by a cryptic moon,

I pace,

I walk,

I wander,

I stalk,

I wait for the future,

I'm me again at noon.

Reviews

[Caradoc]

This gave me shivers. Short, but very evocative. As I like things with a supernatural bent, this made me think of a werewolf. A very coherent werewolf it must be to write this. The whole thing is great by I especially enjoyed the first and ending rhyme. It was very strong.

Thank you for sharing this with us.

-Caradoc

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you so much! That's exactly what I was going for!!

[Caradoc]

You're most welcome.

[CousinLymon]

This really resonates with me. Very powerful. I'm slightly confused by the ending line, but the nature that we all have, a nature that is irremovable, innate, to contemplate the inescapable nature of our selves; very moving.

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you! :) That's everything I could have hoped to hear!

[CousinLymon]

No worries, you couldn't explain to me the 'noon' ending? Is the midday light a metaphor? If you could take a gander at my work, would be really appreciated :)

[Allyson Wolfe]

It is a midday light concept that I think you're understanding. Noon is the time when the sun is highest in the sky, akin to the strongest emotion that a person may or may not feel. When noon hits, the wolf changes. I will take a look as soon as I pop out the shower! I think I had a look earlier today but didn't write a review.

[UnendingOceans]

It's lukewarm. The change from moon to noon is a little jagged, mostly because I don't know why those two had to be compared. It almost seems like just because they rhyme, they work. Lines 2-5 work well, though.

- Oceans

[Allyson Wolfe]

It's more or less an internal struggle that I wish to depict. There is a wild beast in all of us. In the night, a beast is different than it is in day light. Thank you for your comment!

[UnendingOceans]

Now see, if you just say "day" and "night" it'd make this better. Confine it to "noon" and I ask "why not 2 pm?" And you're welcome.

[Allyson Wolfe]

Noon is when the sun is highest in the sky. A personality drastically changes with the high tide of an emotional event. So to use the highest point of the sun is akin to the strongest emotional point in a situation. If that makes sense. That is why I used the word "noon" and not two p.m.

[UnendingOceans]

I still think it's too specific for it's own good, but I see what you mean.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

The wolf is howling for more. Doesn't have a feline feel, it is excellent as it is:)

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you so much!

[Chris]

A fair sense of movement - though for me it's more of a feline feel than wolf. Just my sense of the words used and the flow. Welcome to WC.

[Allyson Wolfe]

Thank you. I attempted to make it more predatory but may have gotten feline as a result.

[Chris]

prolly just me - and it could be a "guy" thing