written: June 26, 2012
photo: Ringling Bros. Museum, Sarasota Florida (February 13, 2011)
I'm deciding whether to keep the words to the right of the picture as is...what do you think...??
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I used to be quite he Greek mythology buff, so the story of Atlas always intrigued me, apart from the 'What did he stand on, if he was carrying the world...Okay, then, what did the Great Turtle stand on?, ad infinitum.
I can think of few punishments greater, not even Sisyphus', than having to bear the entire weight of the world, whether literally, as Atlas, or in a figurative sense, and not having the option to observe or modify the results or the process! Then, too, there's Antarctica on the collarbone: talk about a pain in the neck! And miles beyond anything any one of us could define as 'lonely'!
I agree with the consensus, that the crowding effect of the photo on the first stanza is disconcerting, and it were better that the copy were moved either above or below, rather than beside.
There is a definite difference between being lonely and being all alone.. Not many speak of that.. nice point with and awesome write..xo and this pic is perfect..xo
I must say that you captured that drudgery feeling so acutely, that I'm tired just from reading your words and gazing at the picture. I think that to fully understand what you're saying ... leaving it the way it is as our eyes travel from line to line, we are given that short glimpse of this statues grim haughty burden. The courage it takes to try to carry such weight ... most definately is captured in your words of thoughtful reflection. That one trail can seem lonely...but it is one that can be best traveled alone. Stunning as always Allen :)
i liked the combination of the picture and words, the picture suggesting the a heavy load to carry. i liked the idea of being alone but not lonely there is a fine line between the two. fantastic.
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