Adrift

He came in from the dark of the monsoon of his soul

and pondered how he drifted so far from land

desecration and destruction…torment and anguish

waiting on the other side, hoping I’d find it but praying I don’t

fear, hopelessness and all that appears

statements of contracts entering the room

screaming, “not today, tormenter”

“not today”…

 

And so he becomes me in thought and despair

waiting for the turn, the moment of truth

until I and me combine with him and he

shuttering, tossing my food, crying inside

traffic jams in my mind due to congestion

wailing to my assailant, “not yet”,

I’m here to stay

“not quite yet”…

 

Finally, night becomes dawn in the recess of my heart

fluttering amongst the flowers, plants, and trees

those swaying trees of time and wonder

fate hanging on by a thumbnail and a prayer

receiving and sending love from heaven

in the form of a lightning bolt, a rainbow

believing at the end, “I’m free to be”

knowing “I’m free at last”…

 

Author's Note

written: June 28, 2012
photo: Heaven (February 13, 2011)

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

This is most certainly something I can relate to. Spending most of my life living for others I'm now at a point of integration of what I want, who I want to be and letting go of the past.. A difficult journey.. but it's that rainbow at the end that I keep seeing.. the freedom of standing in your own power..your own essence and loving it for the first time... well there's nothing like it. I hope to be there soon.. Wonderful insight Allen and as always food for thought and soul..xo

[K writes]

this is such a wonderful write, so beautiful

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks MW ... hard to imagine I wrote that almost 10 years ago... Jeez, where does that time go...? Appreciate your comments Kaykey.

[K writes]

not a problem...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You capture a sense of longing in the one...Allen...you can see this in the lines from start to finish...in each stanza opens more into the read...and you as a reader feel absorbed into the whole write...like the feelings felt in the words...yet there is a release in the end of it all...

[Shweta Singh]

I've fallen in love with this piece...every bit of it contributes to long lasting impression.

[Sunni Davis]

This touches me so deeply. Its beautiful!

You know, I also wrote a poem called "Adrift". Mine is vastly different than yours though. I find it fascinating how one word can be so different to two minds.

[Anne Timmins]

This is a lovely poem!

[Helen Crutchett]

A deep soul-searching write. Starting with the 'moonsoon of his soul" (I liked that phrase)....to the final stanza with the breaking of the chains to be 'free'. Good work!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Allen, I always love your writing but this is one is very special, more so than any other write I have read of yours up until today.

[Rose of Gondor]

At first the switch from third person to first person was slightly confusing, and then I finished it, and I understood. Beautiful and inspirational. I especially love that last stanza!

[Priscilla Sayers]

A beautiful poem that is not only inspirational but it cuts to the core to the reader as you have placed us in this pain with you through the power of your voice! Bravo!

[Becky C Strukamp]

This devours my emptiness and shutters my inner turmoils, you capture raw inner confrontations within ourselves so exquistely.

"Finally, night becomes dawn in the recess of my heart" this line empowers ones mind and for me its saying, "carry on my wayward child as this is how it is to be"

A wonderful poem and delivered with ease and perfection as the minds eye instructs. Most excellent Allen!