Sounds

breaking the sound barrier

     Sounds

 

...of the male

          cooing his mate

...of the gulf

          spraying its breath

 ...of the phoner

          spouting his views

...of the boppers

          planning their night

 

All while I take in

the sounds all about me

bombarding my senses

               engulfing my thoughts

     sounds

 

…of the seagulls

          testing my patience

…of the music

          broadcast by ipod

…of the mother

          minding her children

…of the old man

          “whating” his wife

 

                      This while I sit here

                      and hope I’m not dumped on

                      soaking in sound waves

                      from hither and yon

     sounds

 

…of the flags

          flapping their ‘legience

…of the lifeguard

          blowing his whistle

…of the machos

          tossing the football

…of the pongers

          missing their targets

 

            visual noises

            stretching their links

            collapsing and lapping

            under the burden

     sounds

 

…of the mindless

          setting and spiking

…of the ladies

          letting their views show

…of the beer cans

          popping and fizzing

…of my breathing

          relaxed and at ease

 

     sounds

 

…of the children

          enjoying and playing

…of the babies

          crying and puling

…of my heart

          racing in rhythm

…of the laughter

          surrounding my blanket

 

            excitement abounds

            as I paw at the sand

            and realize there’s nothing

            like being alive

 

                   …and hearing the sounds

 

 

 

 

           

 

 

Author's Note

Written February 12, 2012
Naturally I want your feed back on the content....but also on a physical, logistical feature of this write... The first stanza is different than the rest of the poem in that it has the ellipsis (...) after the word "sounds..." while the others have them before each line. I would like your opinion as to which form works best for you.
thanks, allen

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

I love the write and the format.. For me it's about being simply aware.. Listening,,seeing, breathing in the moments around us.. and sitting back with a smile on our faces and being grateful for it all..xo :)

[Sweets]

Such a wonderful topic to write about...
I can easily tell that your imagination is wide, because it's really hard to find descriptions of every sound on earth..
Loved the ending as well...It leaves the reader with loads of emotions and questions for analysis :)
Perfect write !

[Shy Girl]

OMG!! I love fighter jets...they are just breathtaking!!! I also loved this poem. It had the three H's: Humor, Happiness, Hip-Hop talk :) I have enjoyed everyone of your poems sooo much. I can see ya just sitting there thinking and hearing all the sounds that you have come across within the course of just "opening up your window and lending and ear to the wind" :) A wonderful piece. Oh...I think that either way is alright. It depends on more how you were thinking at the time you pondered on and wrote the thoughts. (you are the decision maker on that, my friend :) Just loved that picture...Dang what a nice sight for my first RR of the day. Thank you very much :)

[Raven Starhawk]

I am not sure how to explain myself after reading this. It is a good poem that offers some interesting images that help make for a experience that definitely is something to make special note of.